Chapter One

I awoke to a strange blue light. I realized I was strapped to a table, and I freaked, thrashing and flailing like I was about to die. "Easy there, girl", and smooth, honeyed voice said. I stopped long enough to notice a boy, about my age, sitting in a chair across the room. His was the voice I'd been hearing. "They call me James", the boy said. "What's your name?" "Luci," I answered automatically. I wasn't about to let him know my true name. "You're in a safe place. No one comes here." said James. I made a face. "Except for the thirty or so people that I've been hearing for, hmm, the past fifteen minutes." It was not a question. James actually laughed at this. "She's sharp. Show yourselves!" There was a rustling noise and I gasped. I'd thought there were thirty people, but I was off by maybe thirty. Sixty people!!! "What are you guys doing here?" I asked, unable to say anything more. James gazed at me, his chocolate brown eyes never leaving mine. 'We're the Diviners." There was an immediate reaction from me. "WHAT DO YOU WANT FROM ME?!?!?!?!?!?!" I shrieked, not caring that they had saved me from an imminent death. "Calm down, Reia." James looked uncomfortable. "HOW DO YOU KNOW MY REAL NAME?!?!?!?!?!?" I panicked. "Look." James growled, "We can do this the easy way, or we can do this the hard way. Choose your fate." A frisson of fear tingled up and down my spine. "I think I'll choose...... the unicorn way?" James leveled his hard, cold stare at me. " Umm.... Never mind. I'll choose the easy way." In my mind,  I was thinking Sheesh. He doesn't get out much, now does he?  A small girl with curly blond hair shuffled next to James and whispered something in his ear. "Of course I don't get out much. This is the war between us and the earth."  "Okay,"I sighed, feigning defeat. "No." James said. "We do not let you free." "How long will you keep me here?" I asked, panic rising to my throat. James' eyes flashed as he delivered the killer. "Forever and a day."

Author's Note

I haven't finished this chapter yet, but I wanted to post it just in case I forgot. Comment if you have any ideas of where this should go next, please! I seem to always get writer's block!

Reviews

[Cousitarian]

Okay, good idea. I love where you're going with this tale, especially the little mind reader... However, this could definitely use some editing. Now, I don't mistake this for being cold-heartedness or such but only a way of trying to help. I felt like your tale here was a bit too cramped for my tastes. You should hit "enter" to show an orderly method for who is talking. It distinguishes the speaker, shall we say?

So your main character talks. "Enter"
James speaks. "Enter"
Kyrie finishes. "Enter"
And so on, see? That or I may be trying to be too superior. Sorry if so.

Anyway, I'm trying to help you define your story here a bit better because I believe you could take it somewhere awesome! Seriously, every tale anyone writes is unique or has its own spark to show off. So, clearly, I liked your story and you should keep going with it. It deserves your attention and creativity. Thus, very well done here - regardless of my lecture - and I look forward to this fable's continuance. Keep being creative, you. :)

[Aelia Darkshadow]

Thank you, and no, I don't find you harsh. You're one of the people who actually improves my writing! XD

[Alys Jackson]

Wow... I'm not really into books like this but I nearly peed myself when this finished. Please write the next one fast! I reckon it's gonna be immense!

[Aelia Darkshadow]

Sorry, I got distracted while writing... It happens a LOT! :)

[Aelia Darkshadow]

It's supposed to read. "...tank top..." instead of "...ta..." Oops

[Alys Jackson]

heehee

[Krishna]

I love it! It's great!