Romantic Lullaby

A lullaby about a romantic evening on the beach.

Romantic Lullaby

 

Waltz with me

under lunar light

where the sea

whispers songs all night.

 

Let us flee

to a stellar height

where we see

meteors ignite.

 

Let low key

love songs expedite

fantasy

as we hold hands tight.

 

Let us be

as the stars in flight

floating free

till the sky grows bright.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Simply Beautiful.

Loved the first stanza's lines.


Waltz with me

under lunar light

where the sea

whispers songs all night.

thank you for sharing. blessings. kindred poet

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, KindredPoet! The sea whispers the sweetest songs.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Yes the sea does my friend. you're very welcome. blessings. kindred poet

[Ghost of Jupiter]

What a beautiful dance of love...from the sea, to the sky ... and finally to the stars... This poem is quite lovely Aethereal. Well done, dear poet.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, K!

From the sea to infinity,
we all must be what makes us free.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Very nice...you are a spring of poetic words :)

[wordman]

twinkle,twinkle little star waltz with me under lunar stars
great write

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your rhyming review, wordman! Perhaps:

Waltzing Stars

Twinkle, tinkle spinning stars.
pulsars waltzing with quasars
through exploding black hole chars
forming biologic tars
who strum quantum steel guitars
as they puff on lit cigars.

[wordman]

damn over my head lol

[Aethereal]

I know! A few science buffs might understand it.

[wordman]

it sounded good

[Rossen]

Musicale music taken to great heights, better then peanut butter and chocolate
on those stay at home nights 100/100


Rossen

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Rossen! I'm happy that you enjoyed it. My poems seem to sing at times.

[Jen Yarrington]

I love the use of the same rhyme throughout the poem. It makes my inner perfectionist happy. :) Very romantic sentiments.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Jen! I glad that you like this romantic rhyme.

[rhythm&blues]

Very lovely lullaby, nicely written.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, rhytm&blues!

[:DI laugh too much:D]

Omg this was so beautiful. The rhyming was on key, the imagery was amazing. Seriously, I could picture myself there.

Awesome job :]

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, D !

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Let us flee
to a steallar height -- lovely lines...and something that I have on many occasions wished to do.

This was lovely in so many ways. Really nice flow and meter; good rhyme without being too in your face, and the imagery was pretty magnetic. I enjoyed this one.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Sarah! All of the Gods and Goddesses of Love eventually turn into stellar constellations. Sometimes great poets do as well.

[Karen]

Such a beautiful poem to a beloved. I love the end-rhymes in each stanza (not an easy feat without compromising the meaning of the poem). I also like the imagery used of light and whispers and songs and sky. Beautiful poem!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Karen! Sometimes rhyme adds meaning, but most of the time it doesn’t. When it doesn’t add to meaning then it's a disaster to use rhyme at all, whereby free verse would be better.

[Karen]

I agree! I don't usually rhyme because mine turn out to be incoherent disasters of words and images that make no sense. You, however, did an excellent job in this poem!

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Lovely rhythm, rhyme, and flow. I felt as though I was floating while reading this beautiful work.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your floating review, Sharon.