Ferocity

Oh my heart and my soul!

How you have been so bold.

To break loose and go wild!

How much ferocity have you got?

To wreak havoc such as that.

I look around me,

my soul's gone mad!

Blood all around me,

this change was so bad.

The transformation of heart to heart

could never have felt better,

but the consequences I've created

are oh so sad.

With death all around me,

how am I to live now?

Do I stop caring?

Do I live underground?

My soul, so bold,

so beautiful too;

what do I do though,

when I turn into you?

Reviews

[Kyle]

I like the end. It was similar to a cliff hanger and gave the write more meaning. The end caused me to re read it and enjoy it even more. I think though that you should change the font or the size....i think that might make the words come alive more??

What do you think?

[Allyson Wolfe]

I like the idea a lot! Which words shall I change, though? I'm not one too good at visual displays. Help much appreciated, Kyle!

[Soul Fire]

It's beautiful ! Great work

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you!

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome :D

[Steven Cash]

I really like this poem a whole lot. It is very well written.

Now, I have only begun recently to warm up to poetry. It was always a bit... boring to me.

But poems like this definitely are not boring. nor are they the 'norm'.

So, keep up the good work. Scratch that, keep up the GREAT work. And I will be reading more soon

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you so much! I have more work like this, farther back in the archives. I was never into the poetry thing until I got to University and spent an entire semester facing it. Thanks again!

[Steven Cash]

No problem :)