A Total Waste Of Time

 

Shadows dancing on the ceiling,

Girls in my bed, with no feelings,

But the momentary pleaser, of forgetting, what’s real

 

The ground is turning,

The skies are burning,

My heart is yearning,

For a kind touch or a thrill

 

Work like a dog to make ends meet,

They throw me a bone, thinking it’s a treat,

I can’t move along, and I can’t sit still

 

Torn between, passion and pride,

Hiding how I feel inside,

Like the screams in my head, so full of fear

And the things that they say are always clear

 

Try to remember what I chose to forget,

Try to forget the thoughts in my head,

Was all we did and all we said, a total waste of time?

 

Reviews

[deeps]

Yeah! But as to some of the refernece in the write
How do we know if maybe some of it is really a waste of time.
I'm not talking about the girls in your bed here (LOL)
Sometimes we have to go out of our comfort zone
and try new things to see if we can. If we fail hey chaulk
It up to experince and we gro from it.
Everyone is entitled to mistakes. That is how we learn and grow.
Wonderful flow and I think the thought provoking piece.

[BLACKCRUSH]

I had to look at the poem as a whole , I think that we all ask are selves that very same question is it a total waste of time? For some it maybe, in this piece you brought up some interesting points about life and relationships.I think many people ultimately just want to have there feelings heard and respected. This poem definitely made me think , excellent job overall .

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

there is a hollow feeling throughout this piece that you use effectively - it echoes the chasm the narrator is temporarily filling with other vacant people.. i want to read this again *shelves it in my library for further thought*

[Ferg]

I really liked the ideas and the basic structure.