Solar Particle Eyes

Solar Particle Eyes

A Poem by AndBeForgotten
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It means too many things to describe. Its my soul on paper

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Pairs of vaporizing and surmising lies


Purely expressive, arousing and subjectively nice


Teaching unassuming, wordy and supposable


Looking downward, a spiraling unknowable


Knowledge


Circumstantial celerity in retrospect


Distinguishing alkaline interconnecting


Lines


Vilonia heart strung emotions in me


 Atomistic theories break the falling


Harbored silica, crystalline dementia

 

Breathing


Musings replicate the way I differentiate

 

Anointed hands clasp dispirited


Sinner’s remorse, drifting dreamily blight


Darkness comes high, sinking not a bit


Breathing down my throat and soaking up my life


Drifting in machine simulated existence


Dial in the rain and push down all the paining


Pale and gray tainted resistance


A veneer of shining contempt

 

© 2011 AndBeForgotten


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wow. deep very deep. I love the way that the rhythm flowed and the title definitely suits it well because to me, the word choices are "out there," but you connect it and bring it back, which is the point. thanks for sharing :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


i like your word choice

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very interesting. I love the imagery, as Greg said, it's very abstract. I like how you separated some of the words in the first stanza so that they held a bit more weight. You have talent, nice work!

-Howl

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice poem! Full of abstract imagery and wonderfully descriptive expressions! Thank You for sharing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 28, 2009
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Everything I write is to glorify God. So maybe its not the most technical, or well written...but its what He gives me, and anything He gives me is more then enough. "I praise you because I am fear.. more..

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