SPIDERS

"Spiders." She thought.

"Spiders." She said aloud.

"Spiders." She wrote.

"Spiders, spiders, spiders. What a stupid start to a story." She thought, looking blankly at her note pad.

Leaning back in her creaking office chair, she sharpened her pencil carefully over the bin by her desk. A deep booming grandfather clock chimed midnight from the hallway. As the last echoing stroke faded she leaned back over her pad and started drawing..... a spider.

It was the best drawing she'd ever done. The spider stood on the page, it's furry legs poised. It's beady eyes stared out at her with an expression of greed and excitement.

Then, it jumped at her.

And bit her.

And killed her.

Her spirit departed as a wisp of smoke, curling up toward the ceiling and then twisting through an open window. It floated on icy cold air currents until one dark night it saw an artist hard at work in his studio.

A clock struck midnight as the wisp curled in under the door and around the artist's neck.

"Spiders." he thought.

 

Author's Note

Appreciate ANY Feedback! :)

Reviews

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I like how you have this style with some of your stories, where you open with describing one image, then gradually reveal the bigger picture in quick sudden bursts, leading up to, revealing an even that the reader did not expect to see. It makes your work fun to read:) ..I would almost describe it as a literary roller coaster ride :)

[Stan Lee]

Literary roller coaster ride sounds pretty good to me! Thanks for your comments and kind review. Much appreciated Josiah. :)

[A.W. Carl]

Good stuff- I was waiting for the punchline or the explanation and then it jumped out at me! Clever writing.

[Stan Lee]

:) Glad you enjoyed the punchline. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Not here]

Spider, spiders, spiders. What a good way to start a story.
Great job on this one smiley face :) It took me three months but I finally wrote my review. Ohhh yeah.

[Stan Lee]

oooh yeah! Thank you Dante! Glad you liked it. :)

[Philip Muls]

The spirit of writers reincarnated in spiders, well done.

[Stan Lee]

I always enjoy reading what other writers make of my stories. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing Mr Muls!

[Philip Muls]

Please call me Philip

[Captain Rilen]

The spider and your writing spring from out unexpectedly. I always love the twists in your stories. Great piece Andronicus :)

[Stan Lee]

Thank you so much for your encouraging review Captain Rilen. I'm so glad to hear that you like the twist. Made my day :)

[Robert Parlange]

Great metaphor for the creative muse. It does sometimes jumps up and bites you.

[Stan Lee]

That's true too. Thanks for reading & commenting Robert. :)

[Vernika]

You're absolutely original and that's the best thing about your writings! :D

[Stan Lee]

Thank you so much Vernika. That's very kind of you to say so. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

[Viv Wade]

UGH! I found a spider in my bed the other day, and I'd only just started to get over that, and then I read this! Great story, your description of the spider is very vivid, a bit too vivid actually... :)

[Stan Lee]

Ohh... was it a big one? Thanks for your review Viv. I wasn't sure whether to add more to the description so I'm glad of your comment. :)

[Moody]

Brief yet very imaginative! I love the escalation of events and the simple description. :)

[Stan Lee]

Thank you Moody. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)

[Woody]

you have a style all your own, Andrea! I know a twist is coming but it's never what I expect.
I'm jealous of your ability to craft a fiction with a handful of words. the clock is a nice touch.

[Stan Lee]

LOL. Woody, you too, have a style all of your own! Thank you ever so much for your kind and insightful feedback. I appreciate you taking the time. :)