Puzzled

Puzzled

A Poem by AndyJCash
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We are all made up of pieces, but have you ever wondered whether everything fits together perfectly?

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If you find me sat in contemplation

Please track me during the separation

Because I don’t believe I’m one anymore

           I’m coming apart; up in the sky and down to the floor


 

                        The fragmented shards float


          Unconsciously

 Effortlessly

   Without direction

                                             Without connection


 

            A Neil Gaiman book

           The Californian air

Boston by Augustana

Writing with a pad and pen

Roast dinner on Sunday

                               The need to mend a broken heart

            The urge to get up and go

                       The hope to click once more

 

                                   


I am but one puzzle on the shelf to seize

           Yet I beg, won’t you solve me please?

© 2011 AndyJCash


Author's Note

AndyJCash
The structure is meant to be spaced, but I don't think it's shown as clearly as it was in the word document when I wrote this.

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there's something so lovely about this

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a brilliant poem! I love how you disconnected the lines to emphasise the "puzzle". It's very good well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Unusual poem, fragmented and surreal.Good work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love the opening verse! Nice read

Posted 9 Years Ago


This reminds me, in all honesty, of a good friend of mine's structure when she writes. She likes to space the words to where they're not in the same alignment.
And the concept of us being puzzle pieces is only so well described. That's what we are. Scattered around and I think you pieced it (wow, >< corny pun.) together very well. I like the next to last stanza, and how it has several different things in it. You can kind of detect some confused imagery, in a good way, in this poem. Keep writing (:

-Marie-

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very clever and resonant ending

Posted 9 Years Ago


the structured is nice ..
i loved this :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Amazing! Not only are the words well-chosen and organized, but I love the way that the lines are indented differently each time. It fits.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I loved reading this! The structure is amazing and as ever it flows well. Love reading your work as always. Keep up this awesome writing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dude I really like this. It's introspective but not necaceraly in a bad light! Very cool!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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AndyJCash
AndyJCash

United Kingdom



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