Time.

Trapped within time,
your body is exhausted
time is slipping
but you remain ignorant
as your feet stay rooted
to the ground
of pasts' punishment..

fall to your demise
it's all he wants

so that your soul
is within the hands
of a man who wears
his sneering grin
as he tosses you
into the nightmarish
pits that he roams.

Reviews

[Chris]

A taste of Dominance and a submission... and a question of which is which person's intent.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Time perception differs from our other senses – sight, hearing, taste, smell, touch, even proprioception – since time cannot be directly perceived, so it must be “reconstructed” in some way by the brain. Your contemporary poetical approach makes this reader sit up and ponder ... just like a good write should - bravo... :-)

[Angeliki Largatzis]

Thank you, I'm happy you enjoyed :)

[Carthage Thorne| The Wi..]

This poem is intense. You wouldn't think so at first but as you continue to read on, there is the realization that it's not just about "time" but "who holds it" and what has been done with it. The poem conveys to me some sort of abuse, and causes me to think of a man who is dishonorable and in need of being hunted and lashed with a whip for the cruel things or "thing" he has done.

It isn't even specifically deliberate in what is described but you did a very good job of portraying indirectly what is going on, "showing not telling" as they say, and in that I commend you for a well written piece of work, a "moment of time" captured.

[Angeliki Largatzis]

Thank you very much, I'm happy you enjoyed!

[Jade]

Wow! very deep write, expressed well

[Angeliki Largatzis]

Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed :)