Love Bites 2

more random love doodles...

I wake up with

you in my head

blankets warm

I sleepily linger

enjoying your company

a moment longer

you close your eyes

and find me inside

your mind all 

sleepy and smiling.

 

     ……….

 

Looking in the mirror

I see your reflection.

Opening a cupboard

I find you nestling

among cereal packets.

As I stir my coffee

you swirl around in my cup.

I pull out a drawer

and there you are lounging

                   … and I smile.

 

     ……….

 

Suddenly I find

I want to

know all the

little things.

Reviews

[J.P.O.et]

Wow, this is once again beautifull, I feel blessed to be the first to check this
'I find you nestling, among cereal packets'
I love this and you have a diff but equally effective way of expressing your feelings
The dark as opposed to light print, is there some sort of sig., of course there is
one is before and the other now......... please explain to me further
Thank you April Child
J.P.O.et

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

This is so beautifully random again! I wish I'd thought of this concept. I have tons of little stanzas of romance that just doesn't fit anywhere in my writing as complete. I love this premise and you do it so well. As I can see, it's being taken to. I think the dope thing about it, is that it gives three different short storied visuals of love! It's a 3 for 1 special! Very clever, very precise and wonderfully beautiful!

[Kaden Sylvers]

I love it, short and precice, exactly what you mean, just like poetry is supposed to be. I like your writing style. Good word choice also! (=

[Antonio Valentino]

"My people" see me in all those nice cute places too... the gutters, the bin out back, the ran over skunk on the road... hey wait! Those aren't as nice places as your's huh?

Oh well, I still love your poem.
I wish someone could just see me
for who I am.

That would be kinda nice.

Antonio

[Spoken]

you've captivated the feeling of falling in love perfectly... when you find that someone special seems they always linger in your mind no matter where you go or what you do and I love the last few lines b/c that is the best part of love.. finding out the little things no one knows about each other.. getting to really know them deep. Awsome piece!

[Flow]

very telling of a longing heart. it would be nice for someone to feel that way about me.. wow.. that was very good and as good as the first one. It does have that sad note of being unfillfilled with his presence but still a very beautiful poem!

[Raven Held]

I absolutely LOVELOVELOVE this! It's so romantic, but not in an in-your-face sweeping and grand kind of way. It's very subtle and controlled, which honestly makes the emotions appear more genuine than those that go on and on about the majestic love we share, yada. To see that someone in the most mundane things is what you have evidently attempted to portray here, and this effect makes the love more credible, and therefore so much sweeter.

Once again, LOVE this. Thanks for sharing!

Loves,
Raven

[PianoandPage]

what is it with you and all the amazing love poetry? sometimes i think the best heart prose comes in small doses. love is powerful... drawing it out maybe stretches a good thing too thin.

these doodles are still beautiful and sweet without getting too saccharine.

[Papillion]

I love the way you put this in 3 parts. Very well done!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice and subtle.

"I wake up with
you in my head
blankets warm
I sleepily linger"

Reminds me of rainy day mornings back when I actually had a girlfriend in this hemisphere. :(

-Gabe

[Forest Green]

Spicy poem with much tenderness and mystery. I really enjoyed this one. The 'search' is quite compelling.

Good work!

Daniel