Sitting in Coffee

Sitting in bed,

drinking coffee,

looking at your flowers.

 

Eating bed,

drinking flowers,

looking at coffee.

 

Drinking in bed

eating coffee,

while the flowers watch.

 

Sitting in coffee,

looking at bed,

eating flowers.

 

However you look,

it makes no sense.

 

 

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

wow. i love the sort of abstract rearranging of these 3 things. this is what i love about art. how it's about taking the ordinary and shifting them about. changing the order.

i read this as sort of 3 things we tie to relationships....

each has multiple meaning which works great as the emphasis and image changes with each stanza.

the last stanza almost makes me thing that the writer has a sort of wry humor about the way relationships are and/or end. that no matter how you try to mix things up .... "it's sad and makes no sense".

very creative!

i would love to take this stanza by stanza but i'm fighting yet another cold and my head is fuzzy. i will later on.

[Murphy]

Somewhere between laughter and tears... very nice.

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this is really cute. Its def an original. Least its something I have never seen before. I really like it though. Its really good.

[An owl on the moon]

Your mix of thoughts, fragments, pieces so blend into an existential movement of perfect pictures... A hint at a lonely morning, abtracts of emptiness... So brilliant!

[poetic soul]

wow!! amazing take on the "sadness".... lovely....

Regards,
Poetic Soul

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is very funny yet holds a very philosophical meaning... I have read it numerous times finding a lot of depth in this still leaving me with questions and making me think.