If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Harshini Rajachander]

I enjoyed this poem a lot! and the formatting:D
It gave me a sense of hope.
Great job!
- Harshini.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much.. I am glad you liked it and that it was able to lighten your spirit.. ((hugs))

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮Words cannot express how much I love the format you've got going on here, and the poem itself.╰☆╮

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it.. Was something new, just playing around... :)

[Inda]

You certainly do entertain and delight with these thoughts. For me it is difficult to string thoughts along like this and have it still make sense. You know from a star to thoughts, I can do it, it's just not my strength, so for that and of course for the fact that you've created quite the enchanting journey I applaud you. Fantastic piece!

[AprilRN1210]

hey you!! why, thank you very much sir for this lovely review!... I am glad you liked it:)

[kublakhan27]

Well you think out loud exquisitely my friend...this is just amazing, your words choices are creative and spot-on perfect, the rhymes are seamless, and there is an overwhelming dose of emotion in your ruminations...the last stanza especially called out to me, on a creative and (maybe even more) personal level...a no-brainer for my library...fantastic :)

[AprilRN1210]

Well, thank you so much for such an awesome review.. wow... I don't know what to say.. I am tickled that you liked it.. :)

[WritersRankings]

Very high marks for the presentation April and clever threads of truth and flavor. Very sweet and fun, and probably ranked 12th of 70 poems entered in this here tournament this week, so amazing job!

[AprilRN1210]

thank you...

[Tate Morgan]

Oh the joys of a youthful heart They always see the most beautiful things in us all. it is the nature of the heart that we be happy and upbeat in youth as it is conducive to happiness and survival. However it is your heart that sees the best that you can be. I see it in you as well .

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for your kind words and your insightful review.. I appreciate it.... This was my mind wandering around just wanting to be heard...

[Tate Morgan]

My mind always wanders and talks to itself you are not alone lol

[AprilRN1210]

wheeew.. ok that is good to know.. :)

[Tate Morgan]

hahah i even answer myself and drive my wife batty

[AprilRN1210]

well, she is still around so apparently you make up for it :)

[Tate Morgan]

She is the best without peer I have written of her many times and drawn her many times

[AprilRN1210]

sounds like you are both lucky then:)

[Tate Morgan]

yeah we are sweet on each other

[PearlPoet]

Just drifting by to reread this poem... it feels like the sweetest perfections right now...

[AprilRN1210]

thank you, always nice to see you stop by:)

I am glad you come back for more, that is the highest compliment....

[J. Land]

This poems sings. What elegant simplicity you write with. The rhythm smoothly accentuates each line, seamlessly connecting each stanza. Well done.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you very much for this lovely review. I am glad you enjoyed it and appreciate your kind words:)

That's me, simple but from the heart.. thanks again for stopping by, nice to "see" you again..

[J. Land]

My pleasure.

[Tom]

A tremendous, stimulating poetic reverie, the possibilities are scrumptiously boundless and invigoratingly divine!

Imaginatively penned, brimming over with creativity and wonderment!

[AprilRN1210]

wow, thank you for such a lovely review! I am glad you that you enjoyed it:) I appreciate your thoughts and kind words..:)

[Kieta!]

I'm not sure I agree with everything that was said in this, but I thought the words you used were very descriptive and beautiful! Also, I AM IN LOVE WITH THE WAY THIS IS LAYED OUT!!! Lol great job with this piece :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you.. I am glad there was something you enjoyed..

[Kieta!]

Oh I didn't mean to say I didn't enjoy it! I enjoyed it very much :)

[AprilRN1210]

I appreciate your thoughts, and again am glad you enjoyed. Thank you:)