If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Cory Barrett]

If you were any of these you would be a common inspiration, instead of a rare revelation.

[AprilRN1210]

wow.... just wow... your words always "hit me"..... You, my friend, are so sweet and I cannot tell you what these words mean to me.. Thank you..

[Cory Barrett]

cheers to a splendid evening!

[AprilRN1210]

well, heck yea!! cheers to that sir!!! Thank you very much, and the same to you:)

[KWP]

Well chick, I am glad i read this, it has gifted me a glimmer to my smile and a bounce in my step... so light and breezy that one cannot help to just suck your words right into their own being .. Loved it x x

[AprilRN1210]

Well, dang it! I am glad you read them too! A smile and a bounce always make for a brighter day:)read moreWell, dang it! I am glad you read them too! A smile and a bounce always make for a brighter day:)
I am tickled I could suck you in and lighten you up... I appreciate your lovely review and your kind words.. :)

[KWP]

after that one I certainly will chick chick x x

[Michael Atherton]

I like the pull I experienced throughout the poem, because the sentence structure doesn't clearly end or begin at the head or foot of each stanza. With that, the images of the narrator's longing to be intangible ideas grew, and so did my interest! I read this a few times, and each time I liked it more and more! Great job!

[AprilRN1210]

What a lovely review! Thank you so much. Yes, I tried to pull you with my flow, ideas, and tempting words, I am glad it translated well and that you enjoyed it. I appreciate your kind words, your time, and opinion. :)

[Jack Wolfe]

You told me about this piece, so I 'had' to take a look 'dragging feet'. I don't know how you question your poetic skill, I found this entertaining, poetic, and open ended. I only had one problem, I know this is figuratively speaking, but the line 'If I was an angel', defies all sense of any reality. Kidding, very well done, I enjoyed it.

[AprilRN1210]

You drag your feet? nahhh, never!!! I question my skills for tons of reasons... lack of experience being one of them... EVIL red pens being another... :)

I am an angel (see this innocent face?)..... :P

I am glad you liked it.. gawd, shows how much faith you had in me... think maybe you need to be in that corner!!

[Jack Wolfe]

I have plenty faith in you, and after you lied about that nose-print, I think 'you' need another round.

[AprilRN1210]

oh..... no.....you..... didn't..... I'm am going to shake my head at you and just walk away... :P

[Chris Micha]

April, I love the idea of being something and giving your description of how you would be it. Very imaginative and the imagery is sublime. Beautiful.

[Saumya Razdan]

this is really beautiful :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you:)

[Einstein Noodle]

love it! Nusquam has said it perfectly .. each question gone unanswered demands i read the next .. and at the end i am saying more more more!
and your poetry is captivating and creative .. enjoyed this reading .. thanks for sharing
E.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much! I tried to leave it lingering like the thought trailing off in my head.. I am glad you enjoyed it:) I appreciate your lovely review and thoughts on my work.. :)

[A. Amos]

From begining till end. Truly entertaing and good read

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much A!! I am glad you enjoyed it:) I always appreciate your visits and opinion!

[A. Amos]

Honor and pleasure is all mine....

[AprilRN1210]

You are always so kind.. I truly appreciate you, your writing, and most importantly, your friendship.. :)

[A. Amos]

So do I my dear:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You lady are so very talented .I love this thought you had.Excellent pen ma'am :)

[AprilRN1210]

Awwww, thank you so much girl.. That means a lot.. I am glad you enjoyed this one:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

I did enjoy your musings.You are most welcome :)

[AprilRN1210]

again, that means a lot ma'am... I value your friendship and your opinion:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

And again you are welcome.Luv u too chick :)

[J. K. Beach]

This piece is like a seductive strip-tease... no... that's not right... It's like a woman with a new love, having exhausted the first waves of passion, unveiling herself slowly and deliberately to him for the first time--delicious garment after delicious garment... each one a question... "do you like? Yes I like! Especially the subtle rhyme. Beautiful work, April!

[AprilRN1210]

What a lovely review! I am glad you see the seductive teasing in there. I was trying to be subtle with it.. Your review is so refreshing, it is like you "see" what I was trying to do.. That means a lot.. I am tickled that you "get" it and enjoyed.. Thank you so much!!

[J. K. Beach]

Always a pleasure!