Sent to Hell

This is lyric for my old band, Godsendeath. Could also be interchanged with "Supernatural/Occult," or "Religious."

-Cast into the seething lake of fire

to rot for perpetuity.

Pain has no limit, nor does hope solidify.

Welcome to eternal damnation.-

 

Denied by the gods for eternal salvation,

The carcass of my soul starts decomposition.

Time has passed for absolution.

Merge with sinners for castigation.

 

Requisite the slaughter.

Beaten to submission.

 

Imprisoned. Diluted. Consordid. Distorted.

Imprisoned. Diluted. Distorted. Sent to Hell.

 

-Condemned to burn in the endless fire.

Insolence gets nothing gained.

What's once lost, is lost forever.

Realize there's nothing the same.-

 

-You see what has become of us?-

 

Barred from heaven,

Cursed by hatred,

Society of the damned.

 

Left to die.

Left to burn.

Left to rot.

Nothing left.

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

-Cast into the seething lake of fire

to rot for perpetuity.

Pain has no limit, nor does hope solidify.

Welcome to eternal damnation.-


Ooh, painfully dark "welcome to eternal damnation" especially descriptive
of being "sent to hell" very hot, in the lake of fire,indeed,~An excellent and well crafted
piece ~ Superb Pen~Thanks for sharing in Ice and Fire~

Fran Marie







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[KayOss]

Hm. I could actually "hear" this poem. It has a wonderful lyrical quality so that even if you hadn't said in your notes that it's a song, I would have thought, "hrm, this would make a great song." My interest is piqued and I wonder how it sounds set to music; I wonder how your band treats this.

That aside, the imagery is quite vivid. That first stanza is, in my opinon, the most vivid. I don't even have to close my eyes to be able to "see" the scene you describe.

I must say that I like your word choice in this. You use a lot of very strong words, like "castigation." These are words that make the reader feel some emotion quite quickly and intensely. They work for this poem, which is in itself strong and gripping. The form only adds to this. I like the way that the stanzas aren't all of the same length, but vary. This adds interest and also serves to emphasize certain points. The shorter stanzas gain some prominence. I like the fact that you couple the shortness of these stanzas with short phrases, sometimes only one word. This serves to give importance to each word. All in all, this is a very, very good read.

[Melissa Kesead]

Dark but full of visual feeling.

[Kaitlin W. Blaylock]

Left to die.

Left to burn.

Left to rot.

Nothing left.
OMG...love the parallelism in the end. Really hammers in the point and feeling of being abandoned with "nothing left" to lose.

[forfila]

A very vivid and deep description of the fallen. I do like the wording you used
"Pain has no limit, nor does hope solidify."
That is very well put, it lets the readers feel and understand your view on consequences.

Nice write

Matthew

[Mr. Lopez]

A dark voyage to the ends of our sins can be an irreversable trek. You bring your readers close to a very real visualization of the ramifications to ones actions. Hence instilling fear of the unknown yet a reality to the obvious. A visit to the after life and a warning to the wicked. Very well done my friend.
Mr. Lopez

[robin]

This is good dark metal. I don't really have any problems with it. I'd just love to hear it with music. Maybe "six Feet Under" or "Arch Enemy", just make it angry with lust and power!

[Dark Daughters]

Another deep piece that will be interesting once set to music, excellent lyrics.

[Star-Runner]

Love this piece very much your last verse just sums up the whole thing, this is wonderfully written here. This is a most insightful piece.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

I could imagine this being a terrific song. I was reading it as I was listening to Avenged Sevenfold's "Afterlife". lol Music makes every poem sound f*cking awesome! I really admire the flow and detail in this. :) I'll admit that I favor the second stanza; the sinister tone of it is just excellent. Thanks for the friend's request and great job! I look forward to reading more of your work. ^^

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood