January

My first submission here was also the first thing I wrote this year. It's a few months old now, but I figured it was fitting.

January pens a new page for me;
back to the mirror,
to the infinite sea.
 
As the land disappears,
I find my feet wet.
The sea boards my ship,
the "As Good As It Gets".

I'll drown or I'll make it alive.
This is my coin, these are her sides:
I'll drown or I'll make it alive.

January pens a new page for me;
a brand new telling
of the oldest story.

I'm just a sad sailor
sinking in my ship.
The sea is so cruel;
she does as she sees fit.

I'll drown or I'll make it alive.
This is my coin, these are her sides:
I'll drown or I'll make it alive.

January burns an old page for me;
the life I once loved
has been claimed by the sea.

I'll captain my shipwreck.
I'll steer this dead wood.
Sailing toward my future
on a plank, as I should.

I'll drown or I'll make it alive.
This is my coin, these are her sides:
I'll drown or I'll make it alive.

Author's Note

As with most of my writing, the words are constantly up for revision. If you have any suggestions I'd love to hear them.

Reviews

[Vaidehi]

Very very nice. A lovely beginning. :)

[Elena]

This is touching. I like the intensity, I like the metaphors. Great writing; I wouldn't change it.

[Kelley Quinn]

I like how you repeat "I'll drown or I'll make it alive./ This is my coin, these are her sides:/" Very deep. and the part about the ship and the sea in the beginning captured the emotion clearly.
Great job!

[Fabric Pulse]

About self-discovery, a blank page but yet with a tinge of a stain from past winds. It's intense, deeply selling, soul gripping. A voyage of set sail.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

a prized outlook at something once thought taboo, a relishing process of inert explanation, well written, a great read.

[WynterPhoenix]

In my opinion, I don't think any of the words should be changed. I love it as is. My favorite lines are "the life I once loved, has been claimed by the sea".

I can't wait to read more =]