The Goddess

The Goddess

A Story by Aurafiex
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The tale of a defeated goddess.

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Aria, goddess of life, sat completely still under the shadow of a massive obsidian statue that she was chained to by rusted manacles. She was left alone to wallow in her solitude, her enemies having grown weary from her prolonged defiance.


She had a face and body that was once said to be the envy of any who would behold her. However, centuries of extended abuse had left her battered and broken. Her once pristine white robes were now smeared in patches of dried blood and tears, milestone markers of her unending agony.


The statue that towered above her broken form was crafted in the ghastly likeliness of her nemesis, a demon who took the form of a massive obsidian dragon. They had fought against the other for control over all creation, a right she had zealously guarded from those who would defile the sanctity of life.


Twenty millennia they battled, each bout deadlier than the last. As the aspect of life, Aria abhorred violence in any form. However, she had little choice but to take up arms, for if he were allowed to engorge himself on the souls of man, all of creation would eventually fall to his unending hunger.


A lapse of concentration allowed him to gain the upper hand, causing her defeat. However, she managed the last laugh in their contest, for she had warded all of creation from his jaws with her immortal soul. Since then, he had spared no expense in attempting to break her in order to make her rescind her vow.


She knew that he would have slain her then and there, but as a divine being, she could never enter death’s door. Knowing this, he set his minions loose on her, rending and tearing at her in various unspeakable ways that frayed both body and mind. The fiends even manipulated the flow of time within her prison, making each second seem like an eternity as they cut at her flesh with rusted hooks and flayed her with burning chains.


However, despite all the knives and blades he had so enthusiastically placed into her, she would not yield, knowing full well that the fate of her children rested solely upon her. Through her mirror, she knew that her sacrifices had allowed her children to prosper and thrive. In a way, their happiness was her comfort, a panacea in the face of her trials.


Eventually, even he grew weary of her unbreakable spirit, having resorted to countless forms of insidious torment to subjugate her over the millennia. In frustration, he placed upon her a curse that bore the full extent of his hunger and contempt, damning her to stay motionless for all eternity, lest she unravel her grand design by her own hand.


And thus, Aria was left alone in a forsaken corner of the endless void, accompanied only by the likeliness of her rival whose dark visage watched her every waking moment, as if in cruel mockery of her predicament.


Now, she couldn’t take another step, nor move an inch from her prison, now an open cell as if in mockery of her predicament. While she longed to be free of her shackles, she could not, for that meant destroying everything she had sacrificed so much to preserve.

© 2016 Aurafiex


Author's Note

Aurafiex
Hi!

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I must say for a piece that you 'just wrote at lunch' this is rather impressive. It teaches a great lesson that we must at times sacrifice our own freedoms for the ones we love. Also, your use of adjectives is fantastic, always straying from the common vocabulary.

The only thing I'd have to suggest is that the last sentence is a bit long, the meaning gets a little jumbled within all of the commas. Turning it into two sentences would be a little easier to follow. But it's just a suggestion :)

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Posted 6 Years Ago


You're one short-story writers I've come cross in quite a while. Your plot always seems complete - even when short - your characters read almost larger than life...it's truly amazing.
I like Aria, even with her doom upon her...she still chooses to protect ones she love :)

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Posted 6 Years Ago


You are a amazing storyteller. I wanted to read more. You create situation, dangerous places and great sadness with your words.
"Eventually, even he grew weary of her unbreakable spirit, having resorted to countless forms of insidious torment to subjugate her over the millennia. In frustration, he placed upon her a curse that bore the full extent of his hunger and contempt, damning her to stay motionless for all eternity, lest she unravel her grand design by her own hand."
The above lines I liked. No weakness in the short tale. Thank you for sharing the outstanding story.
Coyote




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Posted 6 Years Ago


Aurafiex

6 Years Ago

You're welcome! I'd be honoured if you took a look at my other stuff too!
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

I will tonight. I did enjoy your work.
Very intriguing. Reminds me of something classic like greek mythology. Your description is very vivid and tragically hopeful.

I like the idea of background music, and I ripped that off for a few of my own poems. Not sure if the piece you chose really fits the mood here, but it's a cool thought nonetheless.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Another great story!!!!! Well done! Love reading them.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow, amazing imagination..wrote on a break?!? What the heck would you produce with a weekend off?! Excellent story leaving thevreader wanting more...like now! Full marks from one happy reader :)

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Posted 6 Years Ago


That was great. I loved it. Keep it coming. It was awesome. I wish I could write like this.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


I've always enjoyed these kinds of multi layered fantasy stories. Interesting concept, as always. I like the premise.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Oh boy!!! this is undoubtedly the best fantasy story I have read all day....beautiful, the imagery is amazing and I love the way you weave your words....I am in love with your character,,, I like to think the curse was eventually broken...she is so strong and brave..a really goddess indeed... fantastic story

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Posted 6 Years Ago


For 'just a piece you wrote at lunch', it is impressive.
I do not read much fantasy, so I am not clearly able to say how this compares with other similar stories. What I did look at was the language, the symbolism... where the words took ME... I read spirituality but also the systematic destruction of our natural beauty... Well-written.

My only bit of uncertainty was this sentence: "By subverting her link with all creation, he condemned her to stay still for all eternity, lest she unravel her grand design by her own hand."

To me, the "lest she unravel her grand design by her own hand" seems contradictory? Would he not WANT her to do this? Or are you saying he's hoping (in time) she will risk 'mankind' to free herself?

It's probably only me, trying to interpret a genre I know little about?

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Posted 6 Years Ago



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Tags: Goddess, Idol, Demon, Worship, Humans, Creation, Conflict, Hell, Heaven

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