The Man Who Wept

The Man Who Wept

A Poem by Jordan Smith

The Sun has set
The moon is light
All are at rest, except for
The Man who Wept

There he lies
The Man who Wept
Thoughts racing through his head
Like Reindeer racing through the night sky
The Man who Wept

All is still at rest
Except for The Man who Wept
How could he not rest
was one of mystery
and one of misery
The Man who Wept

A spark makes all thoughts
cease to exist
The Man who Wept
He discovers something
The Man who Wept

He discovers
Love
Clarity
Faith
Heart
The Man who Wept

He sits upright
and starts to think
The Man who Wept
He starts to cry
His red face
inside his tear catchers of his hands
The Man who Wept

He dries up his tears,
and begins to love,
The Man who Wept

He begins to feel
He begins to understand
The Man who Wept

"She moved through the fair
like the wind moves
through the air
and the ocean crashes the shore"
said The Man who Wept

"If love feels
as free as a dove,
then I am free and
I know my love."
He lays back down, now
with a grin and some rosy
cheeks upon his face, As he has
Now discovered his true love
for the lady with the long brown hair
makes the man feel at peace
The Man who Wept

© 2015 Jordan Smith


Author's Note

Jordan Smith
Thank You for taking the time to read my poem :D Please comment, critique, rate, and share.

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Using repetition definitely made this poem stronger, also, a lovely story told in it:)
You've got talent, looking forward to reading more

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You Anika!
its a great poem full of emotion.good work

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thanks Man, I really appreciate the feedback.
its a great poem full of emotion.good work

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Enjoyed, keep up the great work :) x

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You so much Tina! :)
Tina Louise UK

8 Years Ago

pleasure :)
This is powerful, you can almost feel the emotion and the change of mood throughout. You did a wonderful job with the transition from how he was sad and then figured out what it was playing on his mind. I like your work alot.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You TL Gandia! :)
I liked the four ending stanzas best. But the whole poem was beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You Anna Marie :) That means alot since this is really my first decent piece of work.
Anna

8 Years Ago

You're welcome. Keep writing. :)

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Added on October 11, 2015
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Jordan Smith
Jordan Smith

Houston, TX



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