No more frogs

Please!

A fortunate brush of thin lipluscious skin which stuck breathtakingly electrifying between us.
Two strangers deciding communication was best unspoken,
in serendipitous synchronisity.

In that fleeting moment where we melted into each other, we moved in unison.
The solid earth shifted tectonically underneath unsteady feet,
your taste, rich and satisfying against my hunger;
Ironic against sardonic of a sharpened tongue,
now exploring the warm welcoming crevasses of your soul.

Fired synapses exploded Cyrillic
inviting much more than pillowed talk
listless passionkilling
a hint only of the intelligence behind
the manoeuvring moistened lips.

If I’m never to be kissed again
let this moment be recorded.

Reviews

[L]

wooooo! serendipitous synchronisity! Like this piece... little on teh verbose side in places and could do with a stanza-break or two imho though. Also why such long lines partic at the beginning?

Love this -

The solid earth shifted tectonically underneath unsteady feet,
your taste, rich and satisfying against my hunger;
Ironic against sardonic of a sharpened tongue,

Fired synapses exploded Cyrillic
inviting much more than pillowed talk
listless passionkilling

great one Shanie

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

This is an exceptionally erotic, almost sexual poem. I really love the richness of the words you've used and the way they play against each other. This is really apparent in the line, "the solid earth shifted tectonically underneath unsteady feet" - it has such enormous passion and suggests something literally earth-shattering is occurring. The one out of key note in this entire written symphony is the title, it seems such a shame that something so apparently amazing clearly went awry. Nevertheless, there's always the memory and for your readers a great poem.

[Jaded rose]

Hot and good.

[Coyote Poetry]

Frogs need love too. I like the way you expressed the desire and the story in this poem.
"The solid earth shifted tectonically underneath unsteady feet,
your taste, rich and satisfying against my hunger;
Ironic against sardonic of a sharpened tongue,
now exploring the warm welcoming crevasses of your soul."
I like those lines above. A very strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Richard Williams]

Amazing word usage in a fine poem with a perfect ending. Kudos.

[M Garcia]

great write

[Dan]

This is quite simply one of the best pieces you have written. Evocative and sensuous, I caught myself breathing a little quicker toward the end. Brilliant. Let this review be recorded...

[Ruth]

Such things should be recorded to learn from lol
Superb love..this is one of my favs!
xx

[Awdures]

Bahaha it does have line breaks in the original version...wondering why on earth it hasn't translated into the html on here...hmmm