Chapter 3

JPOV

            Wow, I guess this must be Heaven. It’s so…fluffy. I’m standing on a fluffy white cloud, and in front of me are pearly white gates. A man is standing in front of the gates, staring at me. I walk to him.

            “Well,” I say, “I guess it’s time for me to enter Heaven.”

            “What is your name?” the man asks in a booming voice. I shudder.

            “Jamie Shannon,” I tell him.

            “You may not yet enter Heaven,” he informs me as I gape at him, “I have been told that you killed yourself. You may not enter Heaven until you are buried, and the one who loves you most has properly mourned your death.”

            “But…how will I know when this has all happened?!” I shriek at the man.

            “You may watch over them, and, if need be, guide them under certain circumstances.”

            “But…but…but…”  I stutter, but a glare from the man silences me.

            “Now go, back to your Earthly home, and watch as your suicide is revealed,” he demands me.

            I shudder, and nod. He points behind me, and I turn to see a long staircase, going down through the cloud. I begin to walk down the staircase.

Reviews

[Zombeh]

I agree with Miranda, the point of view will get confusing later on, especially since you only use a letter --> JPOV [i didn't even know what J stood for at first] Anyways... this chapter brings a new twist, I like that, but also, I thought the chapter was a bit weird....... but it's still good nonetheless. Hopefully you can make your chapters longer, great story so far, and keep it up! :D

[thisXgirlXcanXrawr(:]

the only thing i think you need to work on is deciding who's point of view the book is going to be in in chapter one it was from Jaime's point of view and then chapter two was Konner and then it went back to Jaime in this chapter, unless your going to switch points of veiw between the two of them, i think that'd put an amazing twist on the book and you could get more than one point of view from different people and see how they are personatily wise. keep writing though, i can't wait for more! :D