What If

He has me wrapped around his finger
Every string he pulls
He pulls me closer to him
He swears he won't break my heart again
I want to trust him with his word
But isn't that what they all say?
They promise
On broken promises
My life with you makes me wonder
If this is going to last
We aren't like others
But you also have faults that can't be removed
You have shown me to be more free
I'm carefree and don't want others to see me as a total b***h
But if you see me as that than okay
But think
Heartbreak is a long excruciating road to go down
The bumps and curves
Blame me for running back to him
Blame me for telling him I don't want him anymore
Blame me for saying I love you to him
Hey, we aren't perfect
But don't be judging
When you'de do the same exact damn thing
If you were in this predicament
He makes me feel loved
But I don't know if it's artificial
Or if it's the real thing
I don't want to lead him on
And then break him into pieces
It's all in my hands
But do I want that responsibility
I hate having to see others hurt
I'd rather be hurt then them
His love for me is so much stronger than mine
And I just can't see me bringing myself to see him hurt
But there's still that what if

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

This is a wonderful expression of your love for somebody else. But as you know, 'Charity begins at home'; that means you should love yourself first truly and deeply; only then can you truly and deeply love others. Your life deserves respect and dignity. The moment somebody finds pleasure in hurting and misleading you, they don't know what love is. Never remain in any abusive relationship. There is lust and there is LOVE, TRUE LOVE.

WELLDONE

[Dr. Wood ?]

you are not that old so you have time to improve but this shows promise. You have a typo in the 4th from last line which we all do......THEN THEM should be THAN THEM.....easy to do and easy to fix....Good job

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Thank you :) and i will fix that soon :)

[tiajam]

This feels very strong and relatable, in your writing here the struggle of knowing is very clear and i like the way that it ends with "what if" it concludes nicely but also gives the imagery that its not concluded and that the struggle continues. i enjoyed this poem.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Thank you for the nice review :)

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Raw emotion just flows out of this piece. Very smooth and very relatable. Thank you for sharing.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Thank you very much :)

[Lex12]

This is so good!! Omg I wish I could right like that hahaha. Good Job!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Thank you for the nice review :)

[Lex12]

anytime:) I look foward to reading more of your poems! xoxox

[Brennon]

This is deep. I've been through this multiple times though, so I know exactly how it feels. Full rating.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Thank you :)

[Brennon]

No problem. Keep it up! :)

[Lovecraft]

It's a pretty damn fine poem, though I think you should restructure it a little. Add some spaces. The flow would improve greatly if you revised it regarding structure and flow.

Still a good poem though. :)

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Okay. Thanks for the tip :)

[Lovecraft]

Of course, Milady.

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

What is to blame in all reality? Do we really have the free will to chose what we want to do? Hurt and Healing have a very thin line that separate them, break it and nothing makes a difference. Well done

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Thank you for the nice review

[Michael Leon Wilson]

I feel a connection with this one.... but as the boy, I think of lyrics when I read this.

"Remember when, I said my heart beats for you? I was lying girl , it beats for two. Cause I got your love, and I got these vices!"

Some people struggle with good and evil , I am one, and you write the words as my victim and I'm overwhelmed with guilt as you toil in the pain of a game that I myself play.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Wow, thank you for the nice review. Much is appreciated :)