Haunted

Haunted by the memories

Of a distant past

Screaming inside my mind

How long can this disease last?

 

Lingering in the darkness

Frozen, inside this heart

Numbness takes over

Trying not to fall apart

 

Demons whisper,

Hanging to life by a thread

Awakened in the nightmare

Wickedness in my head

 

Terrorized by memories,

Lost in the thought of you

Vulnerable to the nothingness

For what you've put me through.

 

Your prescence still lingers,

Translucent in the dark

My heart waits for you

To make your next mark.

 

Strawberry gashes,

Pain in a razor blade

Haunted,

Wishing for the ghosts to fade.

 

Reviews

[Brenda Sue]

Lingering in the darkness
Frozen, inside this heart
Numbness takes over
Trying not to fall apart

Exactly the way I feel when I have unexpected memories of my late husband, whom I loved dearly. I love the flow of this piece. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[THERISA]

The starkness of your words and imagery used grab my attention, as i read this poem. Filling us with the dark visions of what haunts you. Of a heart broken and than forgotten by the person of your afflection. Thank you for sharing this dark poem with us.

Therisa

[Jessica L Auster]

"Strawberry gashes,

Pain in a razor blade"


Those were my two favorite lines of this work. This was nicely written, and I can't wait to read your other stuff.

[thecoolone52]

ohhhh.... gothic and mystical.... the pic is pretty cool i think that chick is pretty hot but i have low standards hahahaha... anyway great read and nice rhyme sceme i enjoyed it!!!

[poddar kushal]

it is very clear and therefore a great poem. the phrases evokes great pain. and this feeling somehow is akin to all of us...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow very haunting piece... as we go on in life the regrets and mistakes begin to build and some we can shake off but others tend to keep coming around even after we think it is gone... the pain and hurt are well penned here.

[JC Fox]

I thought I read and rated this good job

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

The visual and verbal stimulation was awesome. The dark writers are the ones I gravitate to, and there are far too few of us with such a talent as yours.

[Collette]

A hauntingly beautiful piece...you did an excellent job painting a clear picture here, as dark as it is. I could literally feel the hopelessness of the speaker. Thanks for sharing such an emotional piece, and keep writing!!!!!!

[Baby Boy]

You are no longer haunted
For your knight is right here
I'll take away your pain
You'll no longer have fear

I'll bring you new memories
OF just you and I
Girl please take my hand
And we'll go on a ride

A ride that brings snowflakes
We shall waltz in our dreams
As I plant you a kiss
That taste just like icecream

I'll find you my love
The compass to my soul
We will dwell both as one
While our story is told!




You are a great writer! :) You rock Miss Rayne! As did this poem!

[Nik Dendera]

Excellent flow to this, it just slide right off the page!
Great write, full of vivid imagery and a creepy, yet sad, atmosphere.
Good stuff!