Harlequin

My life is just a comedy,

Jokes and tricks of the stage.

Yet, you are oblivious

To this inside silent rage.

 

Covered with makeup,

Upon my face.

A painted smile, just for you

Just to be in your embrace.

 

Brightened colors,

To fill your sky.

With the happiness I've come to show,

But it's just one more lie.

 

The real in me is hidden,

So you don't have to see.

The sadness I hold within these eyes,

This life that's killing me.

 

Reviews

[Y.F.]

I really like the pictures, both the one posted along with this piece and the one drawn inside of it.
I think the concept of hiding behind a mask is something we can all relate to on some level.
It's one thing to try and make someone else happy, but I think hiding our true selves from someone we love is hurtful to both sides more than it is helpful.
If you love someone, you have to let him see you as you are, you must give him a chance to accept you with your flaws, with everything hidden behind the walls of your heart.
I did like the poem though. :)

I like this. I think its very deep. To hide behind a mask is what so many people do. I really enjoyed this.

[Michael X]

the ending, that really cuts straight to the heart, "this life that's killing me" i love the entire concept behind the emotion, and the metaphorical image plays on one's thoughts as if viewing a stage performer,
the harlequin, always in the act, rayne this is brilliantly envisioned in way of artful feelings,
Brightened colors,
To fill your sky.
With the happiness I've come to show,
But it's just one more lie."
your thoughts flow with a specific melancholy rhythm, the reader is able to fall right into the sway of
the thoughts, eloquently drawing the image upon the mind with straightline effect, playing to a
sensual beat, this strikes me in two ways and more necessarily as romantic not directed toward one
you are trying to gain the affection of but someone that you have already established a relationship
with, and trying to make it work, always having to appease, capturing, passionate, inisghtful.

[Ralphy]

Harlequina comic servant character from the Italian Commedia dell'Arte.(wikipedia)....

A classic way of expression. Indeed, you transpose and combine the words with image that causes me to gaze. Even the curiosity to look up the title and it's origin. This was an interesting way to review a poem. I enjoyed this poem very much. The flow and message are clear and through provoking. Thank you for sharing this.

[Phil Sanders]

Superbly written ... such poignancy ...