the last goodbye

written moments after my dad left

So today was the last, he's gone...
we woke up nine sharp, and smothered him with hugs and kisses.
my mom and two sisters' tears wetted their cheeks, as they said their goodbyes, but mine was completly dry. And although everything in my body was crying, my eyes wouldn't, and my mouth wouldn't but reveal a a fake smile: ''be back ok?'' the words got loose before i could hold them back, my dad only looked at me and held me close in a hug, i could hear him try to suppress the tears when he gently withdrew and whispered: ''take care of them'' looking at my mom and two little sisters.
His phone started ringing,and he held his bags and left the house with our eyes following him out, knowing that this might be the last time we'll see him for long months, maybe years. after he left i rushed to my room, and held a pillow throwing my self on the bed, i cried for a while silently, hoping that none of my sisters could see me. i then wiped the tears off, and took a pen and a paper and started writting.

Author's Note

i wish i was making this up, but they're all facts

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

The was beautiful and really hard to read.... It does not compare because you are Aurora, but my dad was supposed to be able to see on visits when we were younger and my mom would make ME earn these visits to see him for a short weekend!! It was supposed to be every two weeks and sometimes it would be a month or two before allowing me to go over just because she was angry about the divorce and blah blah blah. : ) I hope you and your dad are in much more contact than these days of saying goodbye to him. You are such a girl!! ... To say THAT, I guess I could say that you are such a human, a beautiful heart, daddy's special little girl, perfectly complex and enigmatic, adorable, tender, independent but not by choice- by circumstance and Love, and my Aurora!!

xoxox -Your Mark, forever, easily!!

[Salar Majak]

Oh Mark, i'm so sorry you had to live in the divorce drama,it's so hard,
my parents call me everyday and i miss them both like hell :) but i'll live,
and haha daddy's little girl? maybe XD
thank you Mark :) always
yours trully
xoxox
Aurora

[Patrick Henry]

: ) I'm sure you'd probably would not want to be called "daddy's girl", but I only mean it as far as how I have pictured my sisters growing up. I Loved my family OUTSIDE the walls of the house, but those who had lived WITHIN the walls of my house, I felt the strongest connection to. Whether it be fear or cheers, I rode it out with them all!! : ) You and your dad have a special connection that only YOU two could explain, and I Love your poem that expresses it so. I recognize my own heart when I read you Aurora!! *Dearest HUgzz*

xoxoxoxo -Yours, forever....

-Mark

[Salar Majak]

my dad said he cried when he read it, i posted it on his facebook and he read it :') i'm happy and sad at the same time

[DrD]

A well described scene, visual and compact as it should be. I didn't understand the last line . . . . you took a pen and paper and started "reading????"
In presenting the image of an event, you have done well. The piece is well crafted and easy to read. That's the most important thing.

[Salar Majak]

thanks and sorry about the "reading" i ment writting :P i'll fix it

[quinfinn]

if i were a father i couldn't ask for a sweeter, more loving daughter than you. i am sure he misses you terribly. this is a very sweet and heartfelt little story. i love it...

[Salar Majak]

awwwwwwwwww thanks alot, and he didn't read ut yet :)

[I am renee]

this is sad and it was beautiful as well, beautiful writing.

[Salar Majak]

thanks

[DIVYA]

I am touched and I know this write-up will stay with me for a very long time to come. I wish I had been as perceptive and nice as you when I had been seventeen. God bless you girl! You are good. ...DN

[Salar Majak]

thanks :)

[Sid]

Nicely written, you have conveyed the emotions very well and well I'm sorry you had to go through this but be strong and he'll be back...great write!!

[Salar Majak]

thanks, and yeah, i'll try to be strong :)

[amarlaksh]

wow amazingly written

[Salar Majak]

Thanks,glad you liked it