destined to lose

Please listen as you read



could it be that death is waiting..
by the door?

to unlock my tangled heart
and receive my troubled soul?

Am i ever to see that light?

or would i be thrown
into the darkest abyss of all.

don't get me wrong....
my wish isn't to die!

It's just the path we've all chosen
something we cannot control.

we're all going there someday
so why bother let it take so long?

But still we stay...
hanging by a thread
to the life we so firmly hold
so scared to lose the fight
though we know
destined to lose
we are after all......

Author's Note

just some random thought of my subconsciousness

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

I think the music threw me off, but I don't know. I felt like my chest was crying and I wanted t dance with you so badly.... so badly!! The music is STILL playing and I find myself still wishing these things that I do not own; my feelings, my thoughts on poetry and your beautiful page, and why I write... What a beautiful touch, my Aurora has when it seems that so easily you tempt the very thought of what births our dreams and simple tasks to avert them for selfish reasons. One should think that by listening to you in poem, that we ALL feel Loved, and are transported to walls with no borders, and borders where there are no rules to apply to all. I get to drift in these places with you, when reading you, and I find you to be of a most ageless and romantic heart, far beyond your years on Earth!! This world cannot be that cruel that I am not able to meet you in the latter years of my life. It CAN'T be that cruel to meet a poetess I LOVE in poem past the very words she performs across her pages... The music still plays and I am with you in this poetic dance, and selfishly wish it not to end..... Forgive me, Aurora. : ) So precious are the few that we come to know, that hopefully in this life on monsters and angels... ones will peek and gather our interests to hold and keep us in their forever if we are to be so lucky!! Can I be such a person to be allowed to know Aurora in her future?!! : ) Beautiful poem.... my goodness. I had freakin' tears in my eyes and I didn't DARE wipe them because you put them there. They were yours....


xoxooxoxo -Your Mark

[Salar Majak]

knowing some one through their words is some times deceitful my dear Mark ;)
be careful of it, lol i'm just teasing you.
i started the song and felt myself dancing with you selfishly too XD it felt good
i'd never put tears in your eyes, never even try to put in anyone else's it pains me, wipe them dear Mark, i want to be remembered for the laughter not for the tears :)
truly,
xoxoxoxoxoxoxo- Aurora

[Patrick Henry]

All that "emotion sharing" and I forgot to tell you how I reacted to your poem. lol If we are destined to lose, and feel such a way wash over us, we are doomed to fill such role... I know a lot of what you write is exaggerating certain moods and fantasies for telling a great story or setting up a really great question to ask ourselves, but that is the mystery and the Love: Aurora!! Hope springs another day; the days where we let down a guard a bit, and enjoy the energy of those who surround us. ....I am still dancing with you and wish to for as long as you shall allow, Aurora!! xoxoxoxoxoxxoxxooxoxoxo My "xo's" are longer!! *sticks tongue out and giggle* ...great poem. Beautiful Aurora.... -Your Mark

[Cara]

great sis

[Salar Majak]

thanks!

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine poem, that I understand has a lot to do with the troubled area where you are. Keep safe, and keep on writing good poems like this.

[Salar Majak]

thanks!

[Nick.B]

Good write about life, living and dying...well done

[Salar Majak]

thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

"It's just the path we've all chosen
something we cannot control."
I believe death comes when it support to. I like the questions raised by the poem. Sometime in victory or loss. We were in the game was the important part. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Salar Majak]

Thanks a lot. I'm glad you like it

[Craig2591]

Very well written. It makes you think.

[Salar Majak]

It does,thank you

[quinfinn]

life is too precious to linger the thoughts of death, you may embrace the other side when you arrive there. wonderfully expressed and deep prose here.

[Salar Majak]

Hehehe i think it is a habit. Thanks

[MOON]

Poignant write , life and death , the only certain thing they say certain is death and taxes. deep lovely write.

[Salar Majak]

taxes XD i like this, thanks a lot!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Awesome write, very thought provoking.

[Salar Majak]

thank you!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Nithin Purple]

nicely done ,,,,,,,nice poem

[Jack...]

Life, only but a fleeting moment, quickly passing until the gate closes behind us and the old ways wave good bye. Very cool.

[Salar Majak]

you don't know how much i love your words. Thank you

[Jack...]

Wow, thank you