Life or Death?

In some unusual moment I met with an accident,

Doctor says- time to face a fair game of Life and Death,

All that has gotta work now is my inner strength,

I'm given a choice between Elsewhere & the Earth!

One world comes into Life when I close my eyes,

The other one wants me to be wide-eyed and wise,

‘Elsewhere’ doesn't clear me if it's heaven or hell

Either of them is gonna give me some new thrill!

 

Heaven must be a delight to go as Dad would be awaiting there,

He must be bored without any dear ones to visit so far,

I can live those moments that just got rusted in my thoughts,

Or the ones that take birth just in my Dreams in the Night,

What if I end up in hell as I've been too fortunate so far?

I'll be bullied by that ruffian who’s sure to be weeping there,

Ahh.. these bumps have sufficiently shown me the hell,

“They'll only take away my breath”, with a pain I yell!

 

What would my mom do without me or Dad in this World,

Won't my siblings want those moments that'll soon turn old?

Forever my dreams will dissolve if I choose the former,

I would be a matter of gossip for some days to my Neighbor,

What if there's another layer between Life and Death?

Then my soul miserably floats like a weightless ghost!

Will that be an end of the concept of fate and faith?

Is there a way to come back here when I get bored at last!

 

While thoughts kept swirling, a nurse injected anesthesia,

They were all suppressed along with the days of insomnia!

 

 

 

 

 

  

Reviews

[ANTO]

Theres nothing like going under the surgeons knife to bring all to mind Deepika. The mundane is overtaken by the theological and philosophical, the ethereal and the unreal. This has some fine poginancy injected (sorry for that pun) but also feirly healthy helpings of humour also - I lolled at Old Nick being termed 'a ruffian' - which is really quite an English thing to say.
The reader is left at the end with all those questions while the writer drifts off in peaceful sleep in 10....9....8....zzzzzzzzzzzz
The best sleep I ever had was under anaesthetic ;p
Good one Deepika

[Deepika]

I agree with you Anto! When things go smoothly in life, we tend to have a greater affinity towards the life here on earth. Just wanted to put my character into a situation that demands her to choose her destination in a very short span. With the physical pain and the mental agony, which way can give a fast relief!
And yea didn't wanna make it too philosophical, so added some humor :D
lolled at my own write after reading your comment--"The reader is left at the end with all those questions while the writer drifts off in peaceful sleep in 10....9....8....zzzzzzzzzzzz"
Thanks a lot for your valuable words :))

[Surya pradha]

soul stirring. great poetry!

[Deepika]

Thank you Surya :))

[Warren Daniel II]

A very deep poem, it asks so many questions and leaves a few to the imagination of the reader. These lines made me think and were so beautifully written " I can live those moments that just got rusted in my
thoughts,
Or the ones that take birth just in my Dreams in the
Night"

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot dear friend :) glad you liked it! Just meant to say unfulfilled voluntary desires and involuntary fantasies by those two lines.

[AaronFreitas]

It's amazing how our mind works and how it brings out all these thoughts when we worry about what could happen with doing something as routine but dangerous still as anesthesia. Awesome work... I loved reading it!

[Deepika]

So true..thank you so much Aaron for your valuable words :))

[Not here]

this was great! awesome job and you are super talented!

[Deepika]

Thank you so much David for your kind review :))

[Saddam]

No comment .............Please.

[Deepika]

haha why so ? :P

[Saddam]

Because it is beyond the words.

[Deepika]

lol..thank you Ssadd for your commentless comment :D

[Saddam]

Always dear.............. You're most welcome.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

the last line was the best one.... rest not what you usually write......life after death.... love-breakups..... i certainly dont believe in these things...but i respect your viewpoint ... will wait for your next work....

[Deepika]

Thank you Anurag..:)) Yea trying to come up with different themes ;) Next one might take some time ;)

[Jamie]

Great write! So strong and powerful!

[Deepika]

Thanks Jamie for dropping by :)) Glad you liked it :)

[Jamie]

You're welcome :)

[Double T]

Cool Writing. I love it on how you translate the meaning of life and death. I like it :)

[Deepika]

Thanks buddy :) Glad you liked it!

[Emily]

Nice wording!!
Well done!!

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot Emily :)

[Sami Khalil]

There is always life somewhere and death is merely a passage to the other.I like the analogy of choice between life or death under the surgeon's knife. It really make us realize things and how life is so precious. An excellent write...:)......

[Deepika]

I completely agree with you Sami :) Situations as such make us realize the worth of living! Thanks for your kind words :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:)......