LOST OR FOUND

Will our love survive?

LOST OR FOUND

 

An angry ocean whips our smiles

our boat splits us apart

we fight the swells

gasp for air

fury ebbs

two cores entwine as one

 

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

And then?
This is where glass half-full vs glass half-empty fills in the rest.
Such an imaginative piece. Personally I'm counting on the Coast Gard .

[Betty Hermelee]

I guess it's up to the reader..... Thanks Cherrie for your review!
Best, B

[William Michael Reeves]

You need a preserver. Despite all the fighting you seem to do in your poetry, there must be something keeping you afloat. Your heart maybe?

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your review, maybe my heart; love sometimes is a struggle; i like to see both sides...
Best, B

[Ken Simm.]

Yes I like this storm tossed poem. Says so much and straight to it. Excellent.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank Ken, much appreciated!!
Best, B

[emmajoygreen]

First the lure of the colour and content, the sign of both doubt yet.. more to come. Then, your words - as ever able to say sans obscenity or yell, how strongly you feel or have felt. But seems there is something able to feel, to say that there is so much more to save and for the better. You plait your words into neatness but allow the odd strand to wave its right to calm then, calm some more. The title is so very apt, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Emma dear for an in-depth review!
Best to you,
B

[Chris Shaw]

Relationships need working on. Sometimes the boat is in danger in times of storms. This piece speaks to me of a coming together again after a separation. I like happy endings. Well penned Betty.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank so much dear Chris, that is exactly correct...
Enjoy Spring!
Best, B

[Ladysue]

Betty I love the title as it hold so much truth to this profound poem. Life, relationships and the push and pull of thoughts and emotions that separate , lost and found of connection to ourselves and/or others and then when the fury calms, we see the value and love. This is brilliantly portrayed in this poem.

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow! What an amazing review, you really got the emotions in this one! Thank you profusely!
Best to you
B.

[Ladysue]

My pleasure Betty. :)

[Pete]

ouch. where's noah when you need him. so well said, perhaps too well ... :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Pete for your review, much appreciated!
Best, B

[Pete]

my pleasure. enjoyed the write. happy easter! ... :)

[Betty Hermelee]

You as well!

[John the Baptist]

Interesting imagery in this one. Although it seems to refer to a particular relationship, I think it is true of, at least to some degree, all relationships. Each will know storms and turbulence at some point, and some boats may indeed be split apart. Still, with patience and determination, the fury will ebb and the two cores will entwine.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you John for a fine review!
Best, B

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Love overcomes separation in the end - wonderful! I love the color in the photo that you chose to go with this poem. It's the color of promise.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your spot on review, much appreciated!
Best, B

[willweb]

I found myself holding my breath as I read this and then sighing loudly at the end. This is a voyage I wouldn't mind getting wet on : ) Loved this one Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Love splits and so does the boat, but a happy ending!
Thank you immensely Will.
Best, B