THE PLAN

waiting

THE PLAN

 

I read the telegram at least four times to

validate the content

confusion hovers

as I waver about fashioning plans

to embark on a journey at this moment

or wait for the next telegram

which I hope has more information

 

I ponder over all the narratives

for example, will he be pleased to see me?

what if he is too disabled to speak,

hear, see?

oh, I simply cannot take steps in my fitness

I must calm before I commit to a plan

 

A steamy day

perhaps a swim in a nearby river shall

ease the mind, cool the corps

sooth the spirit

I hastily dress in my swim suit

dislike my figure like this as I unclothe

thus, I must be properly dressed, not naked

 

This portion of the river is serene

slight ripples reflect off the sun

upstream near the bridge

the water is cooler and more rapid

I float and kick, liquid sprays in my face

let go and daydream of past love nests

in a trance-like state, floating and admiring

the surroundings

I swiftly recognized where I am

beyond where I observe

 

As I ramble back to the house

towel draped over my shoulder

 my mood is vapid

until I view something

On the front stoop from afar

I approach and my hearts accelerates

another telegram

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                    

Author's Note

Thank you for sticking with this series, much appreciated!

Reviews

[FGFRANKLIN]

I had read some of the other chapters of this story. It was pleasing to go back along the timeline and read some of the earlier episodes. Great writing. I enjoyed.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for your review and your support!
Warmly,
B

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Loved this
Such talent here
Has me curious immediately wanting you to read it the telegram

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank so much Julie, read on , you'll find out about the telegram!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

doubt followed by hesitancy and then putting off until there is more certainty. This is common for many people. I liked the ending leading on to another chapter.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Soren, much appreciated!
Best, B

[willweb]

So many questions, so little time to ponder, should she go, will she be welcomed, is it the right move or a bit too much? But, she loves him, what else is there to do than to be by his side in his time of need. She shouldn't wait too long because...oh no, another telegram...oh no.

[Betty Hermelee]

It just keeps rolling around my mind!!! Where to turn? Thank you so much Will, always a great review
Warmly, B

[Dave Brown]

Mellow background music accompanies a relaxing, cool dip in the river, which has been pure pleasure, with music and cool of the water creating their own charmed atmosphere
a slight musical upbeat accompanies a positive frame of mind on a slow walk back to the house when, a sudden, sharp increase in music's tempo accompanies her hand lifting to her throat, as she see's a telegraph waiting at the front stoop!
A musical crescendo emphasizes the changing expression on her face and its color fading to a light pale, as she wonders what this might possibly mean!!!
"End of scene."
Next chapter to eventually follow, having series writers, under the competent guidance of BESTB wondering just which direction to take.

[Betty Hermelee]

AMAZING!!! do you want to co-write this with me????
Great review Dave, That's all I can say!!!
BESTB

[Dave Brown]

LO L

[Akinlolu]

Ooh. Your poem is like the calm surface of a clear pond clearly reflecting everything around. The pace seems lazy but life itself isn't a hundred metre dash but a marathon done at a rythmic pacing. And the suspenseful ending is masterfully done. BRAVO

[Betty Hermelee]

Ooh! Such thoughtful and well written review
Much appreciated….
Best! B

[Cherrie Palmer]

When the firey demand 🔥 drains our energy is there anything better than a body of cool water. To refresh both body and soul.

[Betty Hermelee]

Very true Cherrie, and a lovely review
Best
B.

[Pete]

wow, quite the refreshing dip. not a bad way to kill some time while waiting. very cool write, you took me there in every detail. very real and relatable. honest and revealing.
enjoyed from start to finish. unexpected ending. well done ... :)

I float and kick, liquid sprays in my face
let go and daydream of past love nests
in a trance-like state, floating and admiring
the surroundings
I swiftly recognized where I am
beyond where I observe

[Betty Hermelee]

A stunning review Pete, and so glad you liked it….
Warmly,
B.

[Weeping willow]

Beautifully expressed piece, I enjoyed the read as its images took me through the journey of your thoughts and the day. Love the water and it brought back memories of when I use to swim in rivers and streams when I was a kid. Love your words ;-]

[Betty Hermelee]

A lovely and thoughtful review, much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[Neville]

ah' the long awaited second episode does not disappoint but rather builds on its predecessor and is again told beautifully .. indeed, tis deliciously scripted and teases the reader along in a subtle and tasteful manner whilst retaining something of a mildly erotic, or should that be sensual manner and fills said reader with appropriate anticipation and expectations that beg Betty for a third episode to be aired and before too long .. perfectly penned n poemed my friend .. Best Regards to you n ya pen .. Neville

[Betty Hermelee]

Neville...this is an outstanding review! thank you so much...please go back to the first one called "At Bridges End" and then part two, etc.you'll get the whole shebang !!! (there are at least 6)

[Neville]

my pleasure Betty, sounds like a six pack of a plan ..