BROKEN FENCE

A flaw in the bond...

BROKEN FENCE

 

A broken fence

a flaw in a sisterly bond

siblings on two planets far from each other

in childhood we were never snug

she, with knee-jerk temper

me, hiding behind the stairwell in fear

 

Today I mourn for her life

loner with dog

conversation cuts off the blood flow

inept to share what is deep in the

abyss of her inner core

she disguises behind the thick skin

of remoteness

stoic with shadows locked up

for safe keeping

 

One can find no embrace

into her sphere 

into her heart

no elbow room for me

the fence may never mend

Reviews

[Akinlolu]

Sometimes, family members aren't the easiest or the nicest beings to get along with. Many families are dysfunctional to one extent or the other. The pain of coping with this situation can't be imagined. You want that connection so badly because family members are supposed to be pals. Right? But then for an unexplainable or even seemingly stupid reason, the relationship isn't working. You are either fighting constantly or your relationship seem frosted by an emotional glacier.
The pain doesn't heal. So at times, family members withdraw into an emotional shell or even cut off all contacts in order to maintain a little sanity.

[Betty Hermelee]

Very insightful review my friend, not an easy matter to embrace…
Warmly, B

[Kim S.]

this is a sad write, wonderfully written out emotions

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for stopping by and reviewing my poem...
Warmly, B

[fallon]

“The thick skin of remoteness”
I don’t know why I love that line so…. Perhaps it’s because I’m guilty of it at times.
You describe the desire to mend this relationship so well.
I wish I had some nails to give you to help fix that fence.

[Betty Hermelee]

so sorry for the delayed response, but i've been out of the country for a month. Thank you fir an insightful review
Warmly, B

[Miss Sharon]

Sad yet beautifully expressed. (One can find no embrace into her sphere into her heart) Far too many people live this way. Such a shame. ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Sharon for a meaningful review!
Warmly, B

[Miss Sharon]

You are so welcome dear friend. You are a gifted writer. ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you ! you as well!

[Ken Simm.]

This is so sad. Incredibly so. I can empathise because I no longer see or talk to my sister. But as they say I don't think I could verbalise the pain as well.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you amen for your empathetic review
Much appreciated!
Warmly,
B,

[Neville]

.. this reads like a carbon copy of one of my own close relationships and I suspect the sting will never dull .. a very sad but utterly compelling post Betty and likewise sadly enjoyed .. All Good Things, Neville

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Neville, much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[Cherrie Palmer]

It is more than sad. When you see part of your own heart in another that had become a stranger to you.
Your poem is powerful.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Cherrie, much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[peter Charlesworth]

No broken fence here Betty
just a partner suffering from (what ever)
Change of moods before you could drop a hat
The morning cup of tea is two seconds late > the sun has stopped shining

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your kind review!
Warmly, B

[peter Charlesworth]

After 60 years
We are still the same pepole > but some days
She said only yesterday 'Where has Pete gone?'

Oh I thought you were mum

Today the sun is bright she is happy

[Zoe Richardson]

When reading this I could not help but think of my brother. He was an enigma to me. Remote, distant, lacking all ability to understand the sister who was his polar opposite. Four years older and worlds away in spirit, so often I felt like an only child. He died suddenly in 2018, and it felt like he was never there. I rarely thought of him, and he rarely thought of me. I am still struck by the strangeness of it all. How could we have inhabited the same house, the same world, and still be total strangers? Never stop trying to mend that fence. Or, if mending is not possible, learn a lesson from it.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for that very personal and honest review.
Warmly, B

[JessyJacob]

Dear Betty I had to delete my messages due to upset yesterday about my health. I am doing good now, took one more, in office. How about you, I could massage you.
Happy Ganesh Chaturthi!!!

[Betty Hermelee]

Hope you feel better soon
Warmly,
B

[JessyJacob]

Thank you Betty.