A Poem by claire

Your eyes of an intense brown 
Pierce my gaze so quickly
That I feel every secret of mine
Can be read by the twinkle you told me about.
I want to discover your mysteries,
To feel your body next to mine,
Your warmth surrounds me at every turn.
The trace of your lips remains mine,
And a sweet taste is imbued in my body
After you lean over to me and kiss me 
Until you feel like I can't breathe anymore.
You made my body catch fire,
And the blazing sparks you give me
By your presence you make me shudder
When I hear your name, 
When I feel you around me.
I don't want to spend seconds without thinking about you,
I don't want you to disappear from my life.

© 2022 claire

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i am floored by the intense beauty this poem of passionate want and need
no other words would do justice
and yes i did learn a new word today ... imbued

now for the critique ... what is there to say except thank you

Posted 1 Month Ago

Yes Claire, your title tells the reader something and I counted the word mine in your main text three times. Your reader is left in no doubt that you want this relationship to flourish. I feel love here and that is grand.


Posted 1 Month Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Month Ago

Difficult to rein love in once you have boarded that train. Keep it on track and don't let it fall o.. read more

1 Month Ago

That's what I will do. Thank u for ur advice and it was a pleasure to talk with you again!
Chris Shaw

1 Month Ago

Good to talk to you too. You take care now and be happy :)

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Added on May 3, 2022
Last Updated on May 3, 2022



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