I Can't See You

In confused communication this was written. I like the way it bounces along.

I looked down at you today
There in your chair.
Me, I was up in the air.
That's not where I wanted to be.
I can't see you
You can't see me.

I should have sat down to say
From high in the sky
And look you in the eye.
That this is where I want to be.
I want to see you.
Do you want to see me?

But my fear kept my legs at bay.
Down came a frown
I felt like a clown!
What do you want me to be?
Can I see you?
Do I see me?

Is this all a crazy game you play?
Some sort of fun
A race to be won?
I know that's not where you want to be.
Can you see you?
Do you see me?

So here I stand like so much clay.
Dread in my head
Of what might be said
When I ask where should we be?
Will I see you?
Will you see me?

There you are all of the day
Hit with a fit
To do nothing but sit.
Is that where you want to be?
You try to see you.
I'll try to see me.

I looked down at you today.
Stared at your hair
Wondered if you care.
I know where I want to be.
Where I see you
And you see me!

Reviews

[lightsong]

For me this speaks of distance relationships and the challenge they have, a desire to meet for real, yet the fear that comes with this desire, will reality be as the imaginary or not? fear of not wanting to lose something beautiful, yet if no action is taken it will be only "sit and stuck" :> oh! I understand how you like how it bounce, the beat was like a song. Wish You all the best here, enjoy your time~

[William Michael Reeves]

The distance is exactly what it it's about. And the big question that the distance creates. You nailed it. Most of my poems have become songs. Especially 'Just Like You '.

[Lillian Kirsch]

I really liked this poem. The words kind of danced gently along and told a great story, and the usage of repeated phrasing "Can you see me?" really hit the desire to communicate but being unable to home.

[William Michael Reeves]

Thanks Lillian. I guess I would call this wordplay. Repeating phrases twisting them a little each time. Glad you are reading back in my time line. Read you soon, I hope?

[Lillian Kirsch]

Yeah! I love the way you write and the way you portray human emotions. I've gotten back into writing poetry as well, thanks mostly to you

[Chris Shaw]

Relationships eh? This lyrical poem speaks to me about the days when two aren't singing from the same page, they are miles apart. It happens and it can be awkward to say the least. How and is it possible to bridge that gap? Relatable I might also add:)

Chris

[William Michael Reeves]

We bridge the gap with honesty and the courage to be it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Beautiful, your poem smoothly unfolds and shows the huge gulf between two so near one another.

[William Michael Reeves]

Thank you thank you thank you!! I've never really shared my poetry much and to have other poets get exactly what I'm writing is so amazing.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Yes I must admit it is a great feeling. I'm glad you're here and I hope you make a lot friends here in the cafe.

[LJW]

There's a special kind of torture that comes from loving someone and not knowing how they feel about you.

We just want to be seen.

[William Michael Reeves]

Exactly. And the awkward unasked questions leading to answers we might not want.

[LJW]

Ugh.
But still I attempt to date. Lol

[lessa (kenzie)]

such a powerful and emotional write, lots of feelings. So nicely presented

[William Michael Reeves]

Thanks Alex

[Kerra]

So very emotional, wish I had an answer for your questions.

[William Michael Reeves]

Eventually I did get the answer. And with every new relationship come new questions. If I could just dull my mind I'd have less questions.....but I like questions! They lead to answers