Stealing the Pain

When the pain that sears your soul,
splits the barrier.
The seal you placed to stay alive,
To steady your flowing pulse.
I shall steal it away, and bear the cross you carry.

Regardless, the dimly  lit recesses of your mind,
shall be illuminated once more,
by the sacrifice of my beating heart.


My tears will bleed you clean.

Reviews

[Azure]

short yet powerful an deep, your style is unique amazing and intriguing :)

[Sanjh]

Extremely powerful, short but expressing oceans of sadness. Wonderful work bro. The selection of words is perfect...
Keep it up, thanks for sharing...:)

[Reina Stone]

I like the feel of this one. Beautiful writing from the point of view of one who'd delight in being a hero.

[Tasfia Islam]

and it will a pleasure that way
the way u sacrifice ur heart and pray

the way u illuminate my mind
and xpress that u r probably one of a kind......

(loved ur poem)

[The Black Warrior]

This is absolutely beautiful! very emotional, so sweet and elegant.

"I shall steal it away, and bear the cross you carry."

"My tears will bleed you clean."

^ My two favorite lines.

[Duckey]

Loved it. It's a beautifully emotional poem, and just the way you have made it flow so well, and the language you have used is wonderful. But it's sad, very sad. I think you write very well from your emotions.

[Eleanor]

The last lines won my heart. I really love poems with such great endings.
You expressed the pain and emotion so smoothly. Beautiful writing. I loved the way you are ready to sacrifice everything for that one person. How much we long to see someone we love happy.
I'm really liking your work :) Would love to read more!
Thank you :)

[yuki]

Very different and unique love this because it expresses how i feel at the moment.

[BlankCypher]

Thank you! I'm glad you can relate to it! :)

[Ryan Henderson]

I love the whole depression/pain tone that this poem sets, but it also has somewhat of a fantastical twist to it, and I LOVE the last line: My tears will bleed you clean. Perfect sentence right there, keep writing!

[BlankCypher]

Thanks man, it's the kind of thing I write when I'm in a bad place or at least when my head is at least a little clouded.
I will man, have been writing since I was exactly your age! ^_^
Thanks dude ^_^

[Ryan Henderson]

No problem, I also write depressing poetry about bullies when I am in a bad place, like being bullied. It sucks, doesn't it?

[BlankCypher]

Sure as hell does man, I know the feeling all too well.

[Ryan Henderson]

I'm sorry to hear that :(

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

A great sacrifice. Beautiful words and sentences. Enjoyed reading this. Keep writing.