The Moon And Sun

The Moon And Sun

A Poem by Brennon
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When life s***s on you.

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When something goes wrong, don't give up.
Don't try to cut.
Don't try to hang.
No buts.
Just because the moon (your stressor) gets in front of the sun (your life)
That doesn't mean it's over. You'll see the sun again.
Don't do something ignorant.
Life is full of setbacks.
Kick life's a*s.
Nothing can stop you from achieving your goals.
So the moon may be there. But your sun will come back.
You can count on that.

© 2017 Brennon


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It's a good message for everybody. A reminder of some sort. It'd be good for everybody to realize that no matter how life pushes us down, we keep standing up.

Ah right, maybe removing "(your stressor)" and "(your life)" would make it smoother to read.

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Brennon

3 Years Ago

Yeah, alright, thanks!



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This is a good poem with good refrences to the moon and sun. The parentheses take out a bit of that mood.
I think we all sort of get the meaning of them :)
but, other than that, good job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I like your writing style! Even during an eclipse, the sun's light still peak at us from behind the moon.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Funnily enough, this was quite optimistic! The message you conveyed through this was undoubtedly a good one. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is really good! I love how it portrays a message for those who are suffering hardships right now. Good work! I hope to see more from you!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes! Very good writing here, enjoyed this a lot

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brennon

3 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch!
It's a good message for everybody. A reminder of some sort. It'd be good for everybody to realize that no matter how life pushes us down, we keep standing up.

Ah right, maybe removing "(your stressor)" and "(your life)" would make it smoother to read.

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Brennon

3 Years Ago

Yeah, alright, thanks!

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Brennon
Brennon

Lancaster, OH



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