Ashes of Paradise

Prose poetry, for the sake of having something new. I warn it's a bit dark.

Burning the ashes of paradise, falling diligently into my palms. Wet and drenched in the never ending tears of a cruel demise in the burnt nothingness of what-could-have been.  Echoes in the distance lost in their own paradise where I only exist in shadow. The eternal skies of my horizons painted black in the lost promises made only in your eyes. The shards of my glass walls I once built up to the heavens to force the evilness away from my broken soul only to have them fall to pieces in an instant, forcing yourself into my life like a knight in shining armor. Only a devil in disguise.

We could have had it all as I take my final breath before you are only just a mere memory in my wasted life.

Author's Note

I suppose its not very dark at all, and can be taken in different aspects. But I'll leave that job up to my readers.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A strong poem. I believe many people have regrets for leaving or hurting another. I have many. Most of us wish we could do a re-take and been kinder. I like the story and the strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[TPK Stories]

Touching...and yet so emotional...

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

this is emotional...

...overall, i see this as finely written

[paradise]

very strong poem....

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Whoa, This was excellent writing intwined with sadness and a hint of darkness!

[KAREN]

A solid write! Oh my, so many awesome lines! Bravo!!
100/100

[Draven]

Very strong and well written. You did great and I love it.

[Raven Starhawk]

This is intoxicating.

[Amila Jay]

This is quite nice! Great write:-)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Not quite sure what you are saying here .. You are taking your own life, so he will not even be a memory in your mind ? .. You reached for the good in life, but let the evil of him change your direction .. hummm .. .. Be the master of you, don't allow some-one to bring down your dreams ...

interesting maze of thoughts .. .. Jazz