The World As I See It

the description is in the title...it's not rocket science

To me the world is like a song

That sings on and on your whole life long

A summer breeze is a sweet embrace

The sun more than just warmth on your face

It's the wispered memory of a kiss

The wind speaks wisdom most will miss

The "babbling brook" is laughing gaily

Just as the sunlight dances daily

You see, the world is quite different to me

As you drift upon life's stormy sea

Don't forget a happy song to sing

 

Author's Note

Not my best...but oh well. This is just a preveiw of my "daydream world" or "fantasy word". Quite frankly, I'm an over-acomplished daydreamer with a tendency to stick outside the norm. Anyways, tear me down, please.
Love,
CreativeCookie

Reviews

[Criss ;)]

Wow... Lovely write, i enjoyed this. Well, i do agree with you the world's really like a song, the wind's like a rhyme, an ocean is like it's lyrics and the background's it's nature ... I liked the short piece you made every world's nicely written.. well penned in your ways. I love your starting. The poem has a deep meaning indeed. Great job, 'Cookieeee' :) I enjoyed reading the poem. Beautifully written :)

[Jazique]

Nice and thats what life really is; just a song that is never quits playing and you've potrayed a world full of music wonderfully. You had a whole rhyming thing going on very well too. I mean were really great coming together. Well done,

[Areeba]

If this is not your best, I'd certainly like to see one of your best ones, because this one is AWESOME!

[DogDrawler]

Not your best? It seems you have made this poem above and beyond!

[Buddhistboy73]

I liked this piece. Ok, so the 4th line feels a little clunky when rhyming with the 3rd and I'm still not sure about the final line, yet I love the overall feel and vibe of the poem "The sun more that just warmth on your face"........The babbling brook is laughing gaily.....
my favourite lines.......an interesting insight into your world my dear......:)
Thanks for sharing
BB

[CreativeCookie]

Thank you for the insight! I'm not extemely happy with the 4th line either...but that was all I could think of. Once again, Thank you!

[Zippora]

I love to continued relation to the songs and musical ways of describing the world! Great work :)

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

I'm afraid I can't tear you down, nor would I wish too... Cause in all reality as I see fit to say, this poem was TOTALLY AWESOME! =D It made the images dance in my mind as I read it, so very calm, yet bubbly! Like a nice glass of champaign! =)

Kate

[CreativeCookie]

Thank you! I wrote it last year and thought I might as well put it on the site. Glad you enjoyed it!

[The Invisible Girl]

This is a nice poem! :) 100/100 Keep it up!