I Give You My Heart

 

Your like a castle but your moat is keeping me away from you

Just to achieve your love feels like I'm going threw a interview

You already know that I’m in to you

The times I hugged you were so convenient

When I shouted I loved you you were shocked and didn’t think I meaned it

I even arranged it in the stars I really hope you see it

So let down your draw bridge and let my love arrive to you

So I can run up the stairs and knock on your door

Which your servants will open and my gifts will galore

I wanted to tell you after so many failed tries

That the best part I love about you is staring into your eyes

And if you don’t like this poem then it can drown

If you ever want  it back

Deep down in the abyss is where it and I will be found

Reviews

[ebonpinion]

Aw. I really like this one. The imagery is great and goes with the words so well. ^_^

[DC Gentleman]

i definetly felt the points you were tryin to convey. Love given, love not accepted.. great work

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is a beautiful, well crafted poem. It has a few mistakes here and there and the rhyming scheme is off in some parts but it's a very good piece. You did an incredible job expressing how you feel. Good job.