oh dubstep XD

i feel the beat,

rushing forth in rhythmic passion,

flowing through my soul,

lighting my senses ablaze.

with a drop of bass,

my heart follows thee,

with your loud excitement,

i get carried away.

fast paced and crazy,

driving me insane,

flowing through every fiber of me,

you speak right to the one no one sees.

the electric buzz,

wild and free,

speaks to me,

like a fantasy.

oh dubstep, oh bass,

youve opened my eyes,

to a greater place.

Reviews

[Chelle]

With myself being quite a fan of dubstep, I can relate to the feeling. This poem just about describes it perfectly. The flow of rhyme in this poem has a smooth structure for the most part.

One little suggestion, though. Maybe you can omit "something in" from "like something in a fantasy" so the rhythm of the stanza is more consistent. That way the syllables match and the verse would have a kind of beat to it. That's all I have to point out. Overall, nice!

[Ryders1994]

Ill be honest it makes me want to listen to dubstep, this was very nice to read

[Caitlynn Cusick]

yay! =D

[Ryders1994]

haha keep spreading the dubstep xD

[Caitlynn Cusick]

believe me i plan on it... XD sometimes its all i need to get through the day... XD