Stimmung

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Reviews

[Diánna Martin (b..]

I LOVED this.
This is so sad...so brilliant. I do believe that this is my favorite piece of your yet.

Eyeam all alone...
Starving eating my very owned thoughts

You make a reader feel, my dear. And from feeling comes empathy.
The brilliant construction of the deconstruction never ceases to amaze me.

[K. Orth]

My Response in

Active/Reactive:

Barbed wire frankness, ribcage bare--
rattle them bones in

stereophonic.
surreptitious flare.
Oh
So
experi-mental.

Dare I say, "I dig it!"

I do indeed.

Your arrangement, composition is just short of stunning--
twitterpaited to see the use of line and rhythm and

What your words project in my minds eye,

black and white footage-- Nazi Germany,

one of many
flickering reels of footage:

It's sharp like visual hunger,
droops like sagging hope from
starved eye lids,
jailed in helpless gaze.

Bravo-- Fantastic -- more!

Cheers,

K.

[Ethan Hammond]

This piece is the first I have read of yours and I think it is really unique! I feel that the short lines read in a very brisk fashion, which almost compels me to read the next successive line just as fast- fantastic dynamics. The way you have juxatposed/layered the lines in a random zig zag pattern is really aesthetic and in a way I got an impression of my own random yet parallel thoughts. I thought that the line 'eating my own thoughts' was an excellent analogy to how cattle chew their cud; mulling thoughts and then rescinding them into forgetfulness. Some really literal and yet funny alliteration going on: 'What will win in me' (sounds like a thought battle I often have). I also like the quirky, yet integral additions of German in this as it ties in nicely with the Gemanic/Saxon sounds of English, I only wish I can understand those particular aspects of your piece! Very different and yet so enjoyable to comprehend and recite back.

[Wendell Berger]

Wunderbar, Iche liebe dieses poem! Very fun to read, it took my mind places, like a Wim Wenders film. Thanks, Wen

[L. L. Jacobson]

leuchtend. Gedachtes Erregen. These thoughts, yours, are grand.

[Kasia A. Tilander]

Wow... truly ... WOW

This is unlike anything I have ever read, I love the way the words almost fall down the page... like organized chaos spilling onto your canvas.

Fantastic!

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

starving eating my very owned thoughts

brilliant just brilliant

this is masterpieceful. the form on the page is familiar. the italians, the russians. the deconstructionalists in all medium.

[Pat]

When I first saw this, I thought "what is Carol up to now?" Then, I read it. You made a phenomenal word play. It comes across one way phonetically, but you've hidden another message in the spelling.

You amaze me sometimes.

[Moonlight]

You must know that I love your work by now...if you don't,

ILOVEYOURWORKILOVEYOURWORKILOVEYOURWORK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Uh, ya...I love your work.

Moonlight.