~ 'SHADOW' My Travelling Companion ~

Author's Note

not sure if i should change the words from ".....silvery moon" to "......full moon" so it flows better ?
thank you folks, you've convinced me to leave it as 'silvery moon'

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Me and my shadow, walking down the avenue. As soon as I started reading your lines that old song popped up into my head carola. This is a delightful read much enjoyed. Gives the reader some lovely imagery and it flows well. Congratulations for a lovely write.

Chris

[Carola]

thank you chris for your time to read & comment, glad you liked it.
when it comes to songs, most of the time i can't understand the words because of the singer's poor diction.
cheerio carola

[Ana Papaya]

This is lovely. :)
Enjoyed!

[Neville]

I would not change a single word... but if you are indeed edit fixated, then 'silvery' might come out very marginally on top ….. smashing any which way.... Neville :)

[zainul]

It's a lovely poem.I enjoyed it very much.You had great research while writing this piece.I would rather say that you are still researching.You are asking your readers about the right words.You are pretty democratic.
Thank you Carola for the wonderful poem.

[Carola]

many, but not all the poems i write i edit numerous times sometimes over different days.
i wouldn't say i was a good writer, but i enjoy it .
cheerio carola

[NotUsinganymore]

Very cute poem, I feel like this is the mind of an innocent child. Lovely poem.

[Carola]

thank you junglee for stopping by to read & comment

[NotUsinganymore]

You are welcome

[John the Baptist]

I think "silvery" is better. It does not hurt the flow and creates a more vivid image than the pedestrian "full."
I do have one question: Is "waive" the Australian spelling of "wave?"

[Carola]

oops a typo!!! thanks for pointing it out john.
i'll fix it tomorrow/
i guess the spell checker can't differentiate between the two as long as the spelling is correct

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

This is absolutely brilliant
Loving it !
I love silvery moon in response to your ask

[Carola]

thanks julie for your comment & opinion.
my you were quick off the mark, i only just published it a minute ago !
cheerio carola

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Lol my early mornings is when I’m on here most usually start at six am
Where are u from I’m in Australia

[Carola]

i'm up on the gold coast, australia

[Carola]

whereabouts are you located ?