Dependence

My destiny is your fate
My action is your cause
What you do to me, you do to yourself
My path is the ground you walk on

My energy is your fuel
My person is your weak spot
When I leave, you know where I am
My breath is your life

Your future is my salvation
Your emotion is my purpose
Where ever you go, I will always follow
Your sadness is my storm cloud

Your eyes are my oceans
Your voice is my music
The beat of your heart, is in time with mine
Your happiness is my sun

Our lives are one
Our movements work together
Why do we try fighting this?
We can not live without the other

Author's Note

I actually didn't save the first version of this before my computer crashed so it's not the best it was before, but I still think it's good. Tell me what you guys think :)

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

You have done a great job of writing.

This is a very compelling and interesting piece, well written with a strong, clear voice and easy to read.

A poem like this is a lesson, because hope lives by each of us with eyes closed believing in the good will of ourselves.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you so much :)

[Melissa]

Casey... :) this is beautiful! Love the repetition and the flow makes it such a good read

[Heromen Selena]

Lol did I delete my comment? Well I'm sure it said thank you :P

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

This is really good Heromen!!!! I know exactly what it means!!!!!!!! I love how you describe this part of a relationship, this need to be with each other. Wonderful!!!!!!!!!!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you ! :)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Your always welcome:)

[Sam Gregory]

Gotta agree with Shay really, I like the flow and the repitition has a good effect on the reader :)

[Heromen Selena]

Thanks :)

[Sam Gregory]

No problem

[Shay]

It is very good, i enjoyed it... the flow really helps show the balance within the poem and it catches the reader. good job

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[Wolf's Dark Song]

I like it. It shows the power of true love and who can fight that? Nicely done.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you:)

[SamanthaDanielle]

Well done! I've lost entire short stories before because I don't save regularly, but I usually can't remember what I've written to rewrite it. I applaud you for rewriting a wonderful poem!

[Heromen Selena]

Haha Thanks :) It was really tough.

[Leigh]

There is a nice balance in this poem, which fits in perfectly within the subject of Dependence - great wrtie

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you!

[Amberway]

I love this! I really liked the pattern throughout.

[Heromen Selena]

Thanks :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts with a good ending. Funny how some people fall together. They realize they need each other and find some happiness. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you so much. It means a lot.