The Angels don't cry for me.

A very old poem. I learn you can't be forgiven. Just to live with the foolishness.

The Angels don' cry for me.

The kind Angels don't cry or pray for a man with no conscious.

They can give only soft caresses to calm uncontrolled anger and energy.

I sat by the Monterey Bay wishing to be somewhere else.

I was haunted by mistakes.

My greed for flesh and money had  left me alone and desperate.

The sun fell into sea. I watched the first star appear.

I wished upon the first star.

For a dark eyed girl to come back to me.

Then I remembered I was the foolish man  who left her.

Left her with tears in her beautiful brown eyes.

Her haunting words are a part of me now." Please stay." If I left her.

No-one would ever love me again."

 I sat drowning in self pity and anger.

Wished a fool's dream.

To go back in time and hold on.

Angels don't forgive the cold and heartless men.

Men who drain young flesh and leave them for dead.

I found her once.

My brown eyed girl came to me.

She put her arms around me.

Whispered "I forgive you. Please take care of yourself."

She walked away with a true love hand in hand.

I saw she found joy in a man who knew he held a real diamond.

I drank my tequila alone and told the world to back off by the Seaside ocean.

I fell into the sea.

Trying to feel some kind of emotion.

I finally cried  tears for breaking a sweet woman heart.

I sat and waited for the sun to rise from the east.

Not knowing if a man could be forgiven for deeds done without heart or conscious?

I pray to the Gods of the sea, the sky and the earth for forgiveness.

I tossed the tequila down. I walked the cold and lonely beach.

The kind Angels are crying for me now.

They are praying for a man who held greed and hate as his love.

I sat by the sea wet,cold and understanding.

Love is the most beautiful and sweetest gift.

 When a sweet woman open up her heart and soul to you.

Hold on to her tightly.

Give long and sweet kisses.

Don't let go.

                                    Coyote

                                  Sept 1992

Author's Note

A re-write. I'm thankful for the help I received on this site. My writing had improved. Thank you kind writers.

Reviews

[UnendingOceans]

Rule 17: Omit needless words (from the Elements of Style by Strunk and White). I point this out because I think this would be a stronger poem if you remove the underbrush that serves no purpose. Get rid of the words that don't move the images, feelings, and thoughts forward. If you have trouble finding them, read the poem aloud. You'll hear the places it stumbles.

[GunMetal]

I love this so much. Something about it feels like a vicarious memory. The ending is wonderful. Thank you for sharing this.

You work is always written in such an amazing way. A pleasure to read- very deep and powerful

[Norma M Sutton]

You express your feelings very well.

[Junger]

The last three lines was the most out rapped and closer that trapped myself thinking about the whole poem, this is very creative, Again got to love "Hold on tight. Give long and sweet kisses. Don't let go." Best part in my perspective.

[Poetic Beauty]

We go through many different periods of grief anger and so on in this life. You have allowed me to.walk beside you in one of the not so pleasant moments

[Caradoc]

Such truth, such wisdom in your words. There is a pain in this poem, guilt and regret. I see shame and longing. As I was reading this, I could feel each emotion in my heart, caught up as I was in your words. I could picture myself as that man, alone on the beach, gazing off into an endless horizon, aching for another chance.

It made me sad.

I hazard that a poem of this caliber can only be created by one of two earthly beings. A person who experienced this kind of heartache personally, or someone of incredible empathy and understanding of the suffering of others. In either case, I am thoroughly impressed by this piece.

When I see my sweet Sapphire, my Love, again, I will hold her tight and give her long and sweet kisses. I'll never let her go.

Thank you for this poem.

-Caradoc

[Cole Hayley]

A huge powerhouse of a poem. And a old poem at that, you never ceaze to amaze.

[Matt Fowler]

Absolutely epic!

[afra]

absolutely beautiful ...well done

[Dark Tower]

Coyote this is an amazing piece, I love those first two lines especially. This is definately one of my favourites.