The Angels don't cry for me.

A very old poem. I learn you can't be forgiven. Just to live with the foolishness.

The Angels don' cry for me.

The kind Angels don't cry or pray for a man with no conscious.

They can give only soft caresses to calm uncontrolled anger and energy.

I sat by the Monterey Bay wishing to be somewhere else.

I was haunted by mistakes.

My greed for flesh and money had  left me alone and desperate.

The sun fell into sea. I watched the first star appear.

I wished upon the first star.

For a dark eyed girl to come back to me.

Then I remembered I was the foolish man  who left her.

Left her with tears in her beautiful brown eyes.

Her haunting words are a part of me now." Please stay." If I left her.

No-one would ever love me again."

 I sat drowning in self pity and anger.

Wished a fool's dream.

To go back in time and hold on.

Angels don't forgive the cold and heartless men.

Men who drain young flesh and leave them for dead.

I found her once.

My brown eyed girl came to me.

She put her arms around me.

Whispered "I forgive you. Please take care of yourself."

She walked away with a true love hand in hand.

I saw she found joy in a man who knew he held a real diamond.

I drank my tequila alone and told the world to back off by the Seaside ocean.

I fell into the sea.

Trying to feel some kind of emotion.

I finally cried  tears for breaking a sweet woman heart.

I sat and waited for the sun to rise from the east.

Not knowing if a man could be forgiven for deeds done without heart or conscious?

I pray to the Gods of the sea, the sky and the earth for forgiveness.

I tossed the tequila down. I walked the cold and lonely beach.

The kind Angels are crying for me now.

They are praying for a man who held greed and hate as his love.

I sat by the sea wet,cold and understanding.

Love is the most beautiful and sweetest gift.

 When a sweet woman open up her heart and soul to you.

Hold on to her tightly.

Give long and sweet kisses.

Don't let go.

                                    Coyote

                                  Sept 1992

Author's Note

A re-write. I'm thankful for the help I received on this site. My writing had improved. Thank you kind writers.

Reviews

[UnendingOceans]

Rule 17: Omit needless words (from the Elements of Style by Strunk and White). I point this out because I think this would be a stronger poem if you remove the underbrush that serves no purpose. Get rid of the words that don't move the images, feelings, and thoughts forward. If you have trouble finding them, read the poem aloud. You'll hear the places it stumbles.

[deepblue04]

This is amazing! Good job! I really enjoy it!

[Destinyxi]

Written the year I was born, that's crazy haha. This is a really nice poem Coyote. :)

[Mushiegirl]

This is simply an amazing piece of writing, it really brought tears to my eyes and memories of having been in the same position that woman in your poem has been in. Outstanding work and thanks for sharing it

Mushie

[Myra]

Such a universal and beautiful theme you have created here!

[quinfinn]

this is , without a doubt one of the most profoundly beautiful love poems i have ever read! your grasp of the moment in this piece is astonishingly accurate and i felt myself in the same place you described, both emotionally and physically. coyote, this is a wonderful piece! this is the kind of writing that will get you laid for sure!!! it could happen! all kidding aside, congratulations on a beautiful write, you have my envy and admiration...

[Lily Mae]

Amazing as always Coyote... xo

[Karen666]

a daunting piece. i love it

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Outstanding....and powerful as always :)

[J. F. Charleston]

This brings things I need to pay real close attention to when I find the girl that'll open up for me. It's sad yes, but true like everything else. Amazing what message this brings.

[Poison Ivy]

awww beautiful!