We can' t get blinded by hate. When the beaten dog because the abuser. Holding hate and death over another nation. Maybe the country need to look deeply at their goals. I pray for peace in the middle east. Rachel Corrie went with faith and love and die for strangers. She is a true hero we need to remember her and many more.
Coyote
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appreciation is one thing that counts a lot. to really value other's works and place them in high esteem. kudos to you for seeing a great deed of someone, and then creatively portraying her cherishable life with such well written poetry. keep up the good work my good friend.
I get hung up on the punctuation. Those periods at the end of each line absolutely undermine the flow of the poem.
I want you to think about what a poem really is. Take this piece for example; if you took away the line breaks, it'd really just be a paragraph describing somebody.
A poem is like music. Several instruments (diction, syntax, punctuation, theme, imagery, motif) come together to form a pleasing rhythm. Does this have these instruments?
Everyone is distracted by the fact this is written about something that may incite strong emotions. But ultimately this is about the art of writing a poem, and it's something I think you need to focus on more attentively.
To get you started, focus on each word. Each letter, each punctuation mark. Ask yourself if that thing you're focusing on has any business in a good poem (The capitalized W in war, for example. Why? Are you trying to provoke something? Can't you think of a better way to do so than to simply call upon the cliche notion of a Big Brother-esque military-industrial complex? Imagery is a weapon; wield it.)
I don't care too much for this poem, but especially do not like the embeds. Why do you feel the need to post videos - if you want to write a poem, good share it here, let people read it. If you want to shoot off propaganda try elsewhere.
this is an excellent poem portraying how humanity still does exist today. We just have to look for it. the poem flows easily and this is a great poem recognizing someone who gave their life for others.
This is a significant work because it's about a human being trying to make a little difference in the world. I loved the simplicity in your words, but then again the fact that you're giving us also a bigger picture on the whole issue.
It's good when people do things to wake us up and shake us up, she certainly made a difference.
I think you did a really excellent job with this poem. It was a beautiful poem that had a lot of heart and a strong message. Knowing that someone like her existed gives me a little more faith in human beings. I'm going to check out the site now, thank you for sharing this poem. It means a lot.
this is great..i like this...going to read about her now..i have always wanted to write a poem like this...tat's my goal in writing poem..to be able to write a political poem that doesn't not say it's politics..rather it would be something like how our lives are controlled by the weather of politics..that we didn't notice about it..i do hope i could write a poem like that..i haven't tried writing like this because I fear the true value would be fainted by my writing...when it comes to this part..writing becomes a very responsible job..
A Poet and writer who love to read and write.
My pleasure is reading about the bad and good in a life.
Also to honor the Poets/Writers of the past by reading their words.
Remember .. more..
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