Revelation

Hello my sweet friend.
It seems I have been asleep forever.
My eyes have been closed for numerous ages
And have not seen your heart.

Your heart is so bright and achingly beautiful
That I must go back to sleep
And turn away as to continue looking
Could pull me into places I am afraid to go.

I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open.

This revelation strikes chords in my soul
That I never knew existed.
How could I have been so blind?

I must take leave of your heart's beauty
And find refuge in my sleep
As remaining here in this revelation
May change my destiny in such ways
As I am not prepared to see.

 

Author's Note

Artist Jia Lu

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

This come across as a modern story of the beauty and the beast. The 3rd stanza alone speaks so true about this,
"I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open." - She knows he exists, but she doesn't know the real him.

Nicely done :)

[That_Girl]

I agree with what you said completely. I had very similar thoughts. :)

[victoria]

I read this and think that maybe for you as was for me, sometimes we fear that which we know, somehow believing if we do not face it.... even those things that hold so much promise....pains past or fear of change can keep us in a state of sleep where we feel safe... it is good to wake up to such fear whatever the outcome.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

You never know when that penny will drop....
that's when you realise who really is worth loving.
Superb :)

[lee von cleef]

The question" how could I have been so blind?" Then unwilling, unable,to share the music of your soul in two realities, just one.Oh the burn won't go away, sleep all you want when you wake you'll still hope yearn aching for what you can't have.Live love.
Prepare prepare awaken! Let loose the Kraken! Great mind twister.

[andreii93]

Lovely poem :)

[emmajoy]

Read this twice with twenty minutes between, sometimes words read quickly can be misleading. However, dear Neva, same thought second time: a poet-being standing back, emotions strong but a fear of becoming involved too deeply, of being disillusioned perhaps. The way you've worded this reminds me of ancient writing, maybe the clarity of your words, the careful language: 'I must take leave of your heart's beauty ~ and find refuge in my sleep .. '

Very lovely, as always!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Emma Joy :)

[emmajoy]

:) my pleasure, as always.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Unrequited love? Loved the flow and it is packed with emotion. I could feel the yearning yet there was a gentleness to it. Perhaps the love shining through?

[BIIKAY]

very very clever!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This is such an emotionally powerful poem! It speaks to me of the threshold of an epiphany about the nature of a relationship...perhaps friend to lover, and the fear and/or inability of that happening. That last stanza grabs my heart and holds on tight. Stunning!