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Revelation

Revelation

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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It seems I have been asleep forever, my eyes have been closed for numerous ages........

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Hello my sweet friend.
It seems I have been asleep forever.
My eyes have been closed for numerous ages
And have not seen your heart.

Your heart is so bright and achingly beautiful
That I must go back to sleep
And turn away as to continue looking
Could pull me into places I am afraid to go.

I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open.

This revelation strikes chords in my soul
That I never knew existed.
How could I have been so blind?

I must take leave of your heart's beauty
And find refuge in my sleep
As remaining here in this revelation
May change my destiny in such ways
As I am not prepared to see.

 

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Artist Jia Lu

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This come across as a modern story of the beauty and the beast. The 3rd stanza alone speaks so true about this,
"I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open." - She knows he exists, but she doesn't know the real him.

Nicely done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

That_Girl

11 Years Ago

I agree with what you said completely. I had very similar thoughts. :)



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Poignant lyrical write, the truth might not set you free , better to dwell in dreams then see and be seen. Mysterious lovely write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very cleverly written....AGAIN........I see it as someone who is afraid of finding out more about someone they might love...or think they love....Someone who faces a crossroads and finds it easier to remain at the junction

Posted 11 Years Ago


Love the story told here, so much truth to it that speaks to me and I especially loved your conclusion "As remaining here in this revelation
May change my destiny in such ways
As I am not prepared to see." ....such a telling admission. Nice write and thanks for sharing!




Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautiful write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


A hesitancy to leap into love. What a wonderful topic. It reflects on how serious falling in love truly is, and the importance of thinking it over before deciding to change your life with its presence. Excellent write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great work! Story of love and it's blinding flaws. Very good!

Posted 13 Years Ago


great

Posted 13 Years Ago


i totally agree with FlawedByDesign sounds like the heart speaking out and you're blind to what she is saying or You don't see that real you only way i can expline that I love this it's so beautiful and i have been in this same situation once in my life it's like the spirit is crying out saying who are you or that the hearts saying help me i am here notice me don't ignore my love and beauty with the Pure child likeness of your heart I can show you things ones choose to not see and ignore beauty and happiness i see it every day when i wake up the sunset and so many things thank you for sharing this i truly Enjoyed reading this it's going into my favorites. God bless lily


Posted 13 Years Ago


This come across as a modern story of the beauty and the beast. The 3rd stanza alone speaks so true about this,
"I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open." - She knows he exists, but she doesn't know the real him.

Nicely done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

That_Girl

11 Years Ago

I agree with what you said completely. I had very similar thoughts. :)

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Added on June 24, 2010
Last Updated on September 1, 2012
Tags: eyes, heart, sleep, friend

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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