Her Bonds

He tunes the bonds which hang on the mirror of the sea

Revealing deep meanings in the vaguest air

She likes to speak of him to me

When her day catches fire

And loses flair

She tells me of the good things he makes her feel

When he tunes the bonds up and down

Yet she wonders what is real

And if that mirror

Makes her world go round

Perfect joy she says he has shown her now

Seems that her cup runneth over

Yet as serenity takes a bow

Those deep meanings

Fail to hold her

She likes to speak of him to me on her cloudy days

I look through her eyes and see the truth

She tunes the bonds in her own way

And when her day catches fire

He becomes her excuse

Reviews

[Lilly Negoi]

bow down! what stroke me first was the shape of the stanzas, reminding me of cups. a mirror making the world go round...that is a very interesting manner of expressing relativity...and the last lines are another perfect example for that. "those deep meanings/ fail to hold her"...not her holding the meanings...but the other way around. so skilled your pen is!

[Sarusai Hiryu]

twisting, stark, cynical - goody-good

[OT]

firstly, I love the layout - secondly - the poem - the twists of imagery and words compliments the theme and structure perfectly - some wonderful descriptions too "she likes to speak of him to me on her cloudy days" - simple perhaps but packs a punch! and then the "he becomes her excuse" - her bonds, her chains - great way to end!! nice!

[Bonnie]

Fascinating twists and contrasts. I like the imagery. It beckons me to read and reread to gather more meaning each time I read it. Nice!

[Jvl narasimharao]

She and I are very interesting.I am not able to make my poems visible nor am I able to respond to your messages.There seems to be one problem with each site.
yours lovingly,
JVL NARASIMHA RAO
INDIA

[fargone]

clever piece, neva. as always, beautifully written. excellent.