Intricate Sea of Blame

Intricate Sea of Blame

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Can you not come back from where you hide...............

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Can you not come back from where you hide, do you even know

Up from the ashes where your fire once glowed
Do you see the hunters as they search for the flame
There among what is perfectly resting
In an intricate sea of blame

You ask me if the coast is clear while looking over my shoulder
And I wonder if you are trapped in an ancient painting
That holds no answer and amounts to nothing the same
As what will come tomorrow or today
In your dreams awaiting

In the morning, will you be curious when you hear the sound
Of faces growing old and emerging silver-tongued
Will your ears think all daylight has gone when they sing
Of golden pleasures that came round
When you were young

Can you not come back from where you hide, let sorrow be
Feel your heart travel outside of confusion
Forget about the hunters that search for the flame
That intricate sea of blame is merely
A manifested illusion

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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I love the way you use art and nature in your poems, the use of colour and precious metal in the third verse really adds to the richness of the imagery and the last line is just sensational. I love how your work so often seems to directly engage the reader, that makes the poetry even more intense and poignant. You're always a delight to read.

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very nice i like it

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Great imagry and message in this poem. You did another great job Neva.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Love and hope intertwined with a bit of pain peeking through.

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your faith and hope shine thru...

Posted 13 Years Ago


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OK, I liked it, but feel I need an explanation as to what you are trying to say. Perhaps I am just tired?

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is great, Neva!!! Have you ever tried committing any of your work to music?

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wow!
Neva, I love this.
Blame is one of my favorite rants.....
in particular the line;
'you ask me if the coast is clear, while looking over my shoulder..'
lol.... I swear, that is the best articulation of what us humans call 'trust' that I have ever heard.
Great!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is one of your best my friend, I feel this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Oh Neva, this one does truly strum my heart strings and teaches me a bit about myself, especially with your ending, "The intricate sea of blame is merely a manifested illusion." I really needed this perspective today and thank you for getting this one out from between your ears for in so doing I am lighter somehow. I appriciate your insight and delicate yet clearly painted honesty.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Nice metaphors...every vision brings the touch of poetic purity...

Well done...!

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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