Fault Found Without Mention

Lost in reasons I spoke without thinking, sometimes we cannot see

Those waves we want to believe, for darkness all around

Corners of the universe are not known at birth

And the world refuses to give up space

For all your name surrounds

Maybe if we just sighed for one second instead of crying for a new life

What seems to be disabling could remake the bed we made

I thought I was painting a heaven into our world 

One that could hold away every hurt

At least make bruises fade

Inside of shells we stand on hills and look up to the heavens above

Wondering if our destiny ripples as each day breaks anew

Yet we love just the same despite the inevitability

That suddenly shouts from every doorway

We afforded to walk through

Lost in reasons I spoke without thinking, sometimes we cannot see

The battles that laugh nervously for a bit of our attention

Corners of the universe are not known at birth

Yet the stars in our eyes can be infinite

In fault found without mention

Reviews

[Veronica Chandler]

Wow, this is such a soulful poem which oozes with hopfulness and light. The lines, "Maybe if we just sighed for one second instead of crying for a new life
What seems to be disabling could remake the bed we made", medicine for my soul, and, "Corners of the universe are not known at birth Yet the stars in our eyes can be infinite", fills me with hope. Inspiring poem!

[Clay Feet]

"Maybe if we just sighed for one second instead of crying for a new life"

This speaks volumes to me. Man, Woman, Birth, Death, Infinity...bah!

Don't worry, be happy! :)

Today I think with a mind unthinking. I feel nothing save beauty and solace.

Thanks for your your capable assistance and insights.

[Tate Morgan]

Yes wouldnt it be interest ing if all who wish for a better afterlife would come to the conclusion that man came and developed here on earth and here he is best suited to exist THIS IS AS CLOSE TO HEAVEN AS A MAN WILL EVER GET

[Clockwork]

It is interesting to ponder what could be done with all of the energy that stems from those cries if the cry directed them at another facet of their life.

I liked your use of light and dark versus creation and existence. I think that helped re-enforce what perception does for reality and what people actually create in their lives. The repetition at the end of the poem was also very nice.

[Forest Green]

Very unique layout, demonstrating a true skill at word usage and illiteration. The seashell metaphor is superbly used, lending a message that truly lends a message of optimism and the strength of dreams.

[BlackCl0ud]

"Corners of the universe are not known at birth" reminds me of when people are expected to be perfect, to know everything and yet this the truth. I think you're an old soul, Neva, a five hundred year old Buddha who is here to spread wisdom and grant advice. Wonderful.

[joshua deathdealer]

'the stars in our eyes' Excellent poem Neva. I love it!!

[∂αʌ<..]

your imagery is wow...you give life to nature!

[Muse]

The imagery perfect! Your chosen words flawless! I'm starting to believe that you are only capable of perfection. :)

[Dane Osborne]

Yet the stars in our eyes can be infinite
In fault found without mention


An excellent piece. Whimisical yet demanding and grounded in reality. 100/100

[EMF]

I love it, from the complexity and flow of the language, with the words interlocking and burtsing to the shape they make as you speak them. I even like the accompanying visual. Not a poem you can read quickly or on the surface.