Fault Found Without Mention

Fault Found Without Mention

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Maybe if we just sighed for one second instead of crying for a new life..........

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Lost in reasons I spoke without thinking, sometimes we cannot see
Those waves we want to believe, for darkness all around
Corners of the universe are not known at birth
And the world refuses to give up space
For all your name surrounds

Maybe if we just sighed for one second instead of crying for a new life
What seems to be disabling could remake the bed we made
I thought I was painting a heaven into our world 
One that could hold away every hurt
At least make bruises fade

Inside of shells we stand on hills and look up to the heavens above
Wondering if our destiny ripples as each day breaks anew
Yet we love just the same despite the inevitability
That suddenly shouts from every doorway
We afforded to walk through

Lost in reasons I spoke without thinking, sometimes we cannot see
The battles that laugh nervously for a bit of our attention
Corners of the universe are not known at birth
Yet the stars in our eyes can be infinite
In fault found without mention

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Wow, this is such a soulful poem which oozes with hopfulness and light. The lines, "Maybe if we just sighed for one second instead of crying for a new life
What seems to be disabling could remake the bed we made", medicine for my soul, and, "Corners of the universe are not known at birth Yet the stars in our eyes can be infinite", fills me with hope. Inspiring poem!



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Gorgeous pic- gorgeous imagery- exceptional write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva, such solace is found through your wise words...always thought provoking, never fails to warm or impress the reader!
Wonderful my talented friend
xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Interesting what people read into our words, maybe I just read them different, the second stanza is telling and has that something hiding in its words...... and it is not beautiful is it?

Clever write Neva

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a beautiful and insightful piece..

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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wow girl, the graphics alone set the tone for thought beyond the confines of 9 to 5 ... and you do not disappoint.

do we look to the universe to change our destiny for us? wrapped up in our habits without thought of responsibility for the path we find before us? ... which makes it so easy to place blame where it cannot convict

"maybe if we just sigh for one second" ... indeed. take a time out from the busyness of life, we would see the true things that deserve our squandered energy.

wonderfully thoughtful write, neva. muchly enjoyed. ;)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethereal, even metaphysical. Need more be said.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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The ending search of soulfulness and light, well done, good read.

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1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

beautiful work and great imagery, the wordplay and and feel of the poem are enchanting...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I tried it, sighing for one second - and it is exactly as you tell it.

May the stars in your eyes always be infinite.

Bravo!

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The imagery is stunning and we take things for granted in this life and don't always see what we have. We don't see that maybe just part of our little world is the way it should be and that it has beauty in it.

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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