Capturing Visions

Capturing Visions

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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We welcomed hands building walls around our Troy..............

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Oh, how we wished to capture visions

 drink love from altars
where we shared those nights
 so sweet.
To chase away
those hours

when heartbreak regarded our affection
from places deeper than days
 that could not  
look inside our needs.

The rain knows how we tenderly searched
for sun lying dormant
 when nothing said goodbye
Even though
we welcomed hands building walls
around our Troy
Neither of us could see our own faces
or recognize
the heart we should know
before our own eyes.

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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A strong poem. The use of Troy in the poem left me with questions. The walls were strong. But could be broken in by secret and con.
'The rain knows how we tenderly searched
for sun lying dormant
when nothing said goodbye"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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My My incredible...drink love from alters, those words are just amazing they seem to sing to me!
Love this Neva...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The rain always knows.. highly underestimated :) Another beauty Neva... xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful !:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Another beautiful write Neva, done with your usual grace and softness. You have captured not only visions, but feeling and emotions as well

Posted 12 Years Ago


The visions of this poem inspire life and inspire us to live.
You have captured that special magic and sprinkled it on us all.

Posted 12 Years Ago


oh how we wished to capture visions...
And recognize
the heart we should know
before our own eyes.

profound Neva...






Posted 12 Years Ago


A very thought provoking poem. I loved the first line especially - 'how we wished to capture visions'. The images you include with your poems as well are amazing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I read and re-read to explore the depth and fullness of your exploration and use of language. This is a feast of beautiful phrasing that pulses with emotion.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is exceptional, the whole analogy to Troy and the wall built applied to self and each other, beautiful :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love the write! I like how you show the spectrum of emotions surrounding love.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

GA



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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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