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This is a previous version of The Garden Gate.
Soft cream of butter is the center of the bud, creeping up the pedals'
wall to a cool shade of violet; it is blotted in appearance making a watermark
pattern that is repeated in various shades. They are generously crowned in deep
green frayed leaf that is as dark as it is full. Next to this, lovely two-toned
bush is a slender grouping of crimson tulips. A garden gate was hung just there
with tulips on either side, no fencing of any kind to mark the way only the
blooms of spring; and the pristinely painted swinging gate.
This simple gate housed two chairs also painted white. A table was
found on that piece of ground, and an arched honeysuckle vine where a small
brass wind chime was canceled. Mint-julep must have been sipped by those whom
once here sat, and on occasion with an eastern wind, I catch a faint hint of
old-spice and mint. It is at those times I stop my work and listen to the brass
chime and without fail, the garden hinges will speak as I see that old gate begin
to swing.
ShellyHoltLowery wrote a story of laundry line scent, and now your garden gate,cool,I love the two of you and the words ring promise, the cycle of life like red clay dirt deep in those who can read the suns words as it sets. Had to take a breath ,good story.
Hello, Michael
I have not seen a word from you in a spell, I'm glad you like it. The city of .. read moreHello, Michael
I have not seen a word from you in a spell, I'm glad you like it. The city of Tulsa bought my husbands childhood house and we took the gate from the home
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and have it swiging in our yard it leads nowhere but to his memory and a vine
11 Years Ago
That's so sweet! I like that kind of nostalgia!
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yes, me too it's those things that I find priceless
Very descriptive, and I really like some of the metaphors you've used here. I do think you could expand this, since the reader is left wanting more at the end, and I think there's a wealth of material here that you could use. One note - the bit about the julep, it should read 'by' instead of 'from'. All in all, very well done.
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