Two Brother's Chase The Wind

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On a wild and windy day, children everywhere had to stay inside, and my seven-year-old grandson stood in front of me, spinning his ball restless and bored. 

Quickly we gripped it tight and leaned toward me, and whispered, “Did you know long ago people believed the world was flat?”

My eyes twinkled as words tumbled into place. “Come sit with me, and I’ll tell you a secret.”

Eagerly the boy let his ball fall away, as he anticipated my tale.

 “Long ago the world was flat, on its edges, the seas spilled away. In those long-forgotten days, it was the milky-way that kept us in water, and the Big Dipper ladled it out.”

 The lad arched an eyebrow but continued to listen silence.

“Now in the days when the world was young two brothers ruled the light, each claimed a side of the earth, and as it happens so many times in life, they both fell in love with the same soul, the wild and restless Wind. One night a furious Sundown chased after the Wind only to find her wrapped in the arms of Daybreak.”

“What... No way,” the boy protested.

“Just Wait,” says I, and he nuzzled in to listen.

“Daybreak tossed the Wind aside and raged against his brother. The two fought, and a perpetual twilight fell on the earth. This nonday lasted for many weeks. They chased each other from side to side, bending the land in their wake.” I said as I twisted my finger around one of his gold curls, and paused. "And then what happened," asked the boy.

“Well, the span of stars arched in the heavens so they could watch the battle. The smooth and beautiful land was marred and ripped from their thunderous calamity. Puddles of water fell into the deep, and rivers and oceans seamlessly flowed. No longer does the waters fall away. Because the faster the brothers moved, the faster the Wind pushed them. Soon the horizon lost its edge, and this orb pressed in its rotation, as now the earth spins on its axes and the brothers will forever chase after the Wind.”

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You told a wonderful story dear Cherrie. You brought me in and I loved the story told in the words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding story.
Coyote

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you, I really enjoyed putting this down, the idea just popped in my head.
But
I think it needs a little something more, I just can't decide what it needs.

[Neville]

This may be a first rough draft.. but it is without doubt the first rough draft of something that could eventually be a most amazing story indeed and I do mean that.. With the exception of one or two little typos and a grammar review (both minor issues and quick to put right) this could become a best seller.. it is everything a child and many of us grown up kids look for either to read or have read to us... It is like a 21st century North American equivalent version of some great Greek myth in the making or a summat.. it is certainly very special and has ever so much potential.... Good luck with it and All Good Things... Neville

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Neville, I am always entertained by my typos and or auto correct (which is not my friend) :)
It needs a little something more I'm just not sure what.

[Neville]

a little time and at least a few more chapters then bingo... good to go..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An entertaining a nice short diversion to explain to flat earthers that things have changed lol. Some still believe it is not so.

Second line "spinning his ball restless and bored"

[Cherrie Palmer]

Later today I hope to flesh it out alittle.
And thank you for reading this silly tale.